Heyo crazy cronie here,review on 29/03/2021 @chap27 (released chap till date: 27)review divided in: Short reviewLong review IMORatingsConclusionWarning (includes spoilers) short review: Gives you 'Accept disciples and become stronger' and 'History's no one founder' vibes. AND LET ME SAY IT ONCE AGAIN, THE REVIEW IS BASED ON JUST 30 CHAPS!long review: pros: 1) Even though the story isn't original, this is still a fresh read since this ain't the type of plotline WN authors generally pick coz it's a lot more difficult.2) A light hearted novel with almost zero tension. (This can both be a pro or a con depending on readers. To me a pro.)3) MC is smart unlike other novels where the main trait of the mc is idiocy. No plot armour saving MC's ass, mc knows to hide, to run.... Atleast for now that's the casd4) I love the pacing of this novel. Literally the events are not postponed forever and takes place when you need them. 5) Side chara gets the deserved attention. Even though still less than 30 chaps I know the author is giving them the screen time required.6) Author interacts with the readers... Listens to their ideas, opinions and advices and uses them, a big plus compared to those who just take many criticisms and advices comments as malice....7) Maybe because it is new but the updates are stable.. and it is even 10 chaps a week!! Something which I love!!cons:1) [NOT REALLY A CONS] Too much info? Author sometimes give more than info dump required. (I cut my entertainment points coz of that.)2) A light hearted novel with almost zero tension as said above. (This can both be a pro or a con depending on readers. To me a pro since I was searching something like this.)3) [NOT REALLY A CONS] Nothing can be said clearly about world. We don't exactly know where the plot is heading... But then again WE ARE JUST 30 CHAPS IN!!4) MC doesn't have really have any ambition. Like*SPOILER* he just gets a disciple coz the system said so... The system didn't threaten him and neither it was shown that mc wanted to become really strong!!That maybe coz it's just 30 chaps and maybe revealed in the future.5) [NOT REALLY A CONS] Easy to understand writing with little bit of typo errors and some grammatical mistakes which are negligible. IMO:- A little less info dump would be better... - A little ambitious MC would be a big plus for this novel, like creating your own clan/group/organisation... Just a lil bit of hint would be fine ... Even something like wanting to live a carefree life that's why making your disciples strong is also okay As long as my opinions doesn't spoil the plotRATINGS: writing: 8/10 (con-5)update: 9/10 (pro-7)plot: 8/10 (pro-1&2, con-1&3) characters: 8.5/10 (pro-3&5, con-4)pacing: 8.5/10 (pro-4)dialogues: 8/10 (pro-5)entertainment: 8.5/10OVERALL: 4.2/5 Conclusion:This novel has excellent potential! I am just worried like many other WN authors, he doesn't stop updating... I am seriously waiting for more updates:). Thanks for the chapters!If possible pin this review @PurpleSpring bruh!Next review after chap 100WARNING: *SPOILER (not exactly)*- MC till now seems to be neutral. Neither hero, nor villain... Should have been anti hero but even that isn't mentioned...-
I like the premise of the story, there haven't been any annoying stereotypical plot points and the characters are pretty good.The writing quality isn't the best right now, but when author gets an editor that will be great too I expect. Overall I enjoy the story a lot right now ?
Pretty good - also to balance out that 1 star review about the MC’s name
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There are so many problems with the translation that I'm not too sure where I should start ?Firstly, there are plenty of occasions with inappropriate choice of words. The Grammer and sentence structures are also off.Secondly, I do not like the Americanization of the novels. E.g. changing the Main Characters name from a Chinese name to a Western name. I have always been against translators localizing the translation and taking such a liberal approach in defacing/butchering the original author's work.Besides, if I was looking for a Western novel, I would look for it on Kindle, preferably written by a Western author. I find all these fake Americanized novels off-putting and will not be earning any coins from me.
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why is sukuna not evil, and why are there no updates
Great **icological setup of the main character, with multiple issues and disappointements that make him grows. Intersting beginning...!! Please go on!
Creative writing. Exemplary leadership shown by Colonel Balogun to help his brother explore his potential. A wonderful example of strong brotherhood.
It goes without saying that the author's novels are good. Even this one is no exception. I'd suggest you read it.
: i dont know u change everything from real record that make confused, the story should be enjoyable but the change of all character, world building make me confused. Did author expect us as reader to know the world author build without such explanation if author change almost everything about the football story goes? Like creating new people. How we can knew about their dominant skill to follow up the story. Really everything should be fine if author just take the real person or just make a explanation/description if author want make every player are new.I hope author try to research more about football then add that to the story. It just like random people wrote about football, not some football enthusiast wrote it
Wow it's one of a kind, I love it