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I'm sad to say that the original felt so much better to read, and although this version gave more information into his mother's past. It convoluted the leveling system and just made the reading aquard. I pray the author will either continue the original or do another rewrite because this one isn't worth reading
I like how Daren is being more of a reasonable person than Marceus. I have qualms about using mockery as an encouragement. Marceus! You can encourage people without teasing and degrading their person! Poor Daren.
Evlin is such a savage! I can see why you have her as your favourite. Please give me more Lilith interactions!
I've read the entirety of the updates and some concepts still confuse me for some reason, like the origin of beasts and spirits, or did I just miss them? Also, the consistent change of characters in focus is quite distracting. I suggest that you dwell on a particular group for an extended window before moving on to the next.
The action scenes are quite abrupt, so it lessens the excitement. You do not need to use such complex words to relay an action; you just have to narrate to the readers what you're seeing in your mind as honestly as possible.
I don't think that your grammar is that bad. Although, I have noticed overuse, misuse, and absence of punctuations in several passages. Punctuations are like the backbone of grammar. It allows the writers the opportunity to have better transitions. It is our job as writers to study te very grammar aids in out story-telling, and we are always learning. In addition to this, instead of using just adjectives, can you elaborate more on your descriptions? The readers would like to see the vividness of your imagination! :D
I did not say anything out of spite. I hope that you take them as constructive.
I'll be cheering you one! Your story has a great setting and there will definitely be readers who will love this utterly.
I Absolutely love it it is fantastic please please please do not drop this novel thank you
I definitely think you could improve in some areas.
As said in other reviews, the grammar is quite poor but you can't be blamed for this as this site isn't exactly made for English stories, rather translations and for people who are attempting to start grasping the English language, which is difficult, mind you!
I do love the idea of the story, I really do, so keep up with that!
Character design is a little bland but I feel if that can be improved in later chapters and or by adding in some more descriptions in earlier chapters, say if you were to go back and review them.
Overall, 3/5!
This isn't bad at all! Really good start, and I'm excited to see where this'll go!
Let me know if you'd like me to go through the first 10 chapters, for instance, and give them a pass-over to make the style better fit for English readers! Free of charge, of course!
This is a very good novel so far with little to no cliches at all. MC is shown to be very intelligent,cunning, and cold. It updates on a daily basis which I appreciate a lot and I have very high expectations for this novel. I dont see any poisons and author is doing a great job!
The story is good but the grammar is unbearable. It's dissapointing. You could've done a better job. It's like reading a lousy wuxia story with a realistic genre.
to translator: I hate when I am about to hug someone really sexy and my face hits the mirror.story: Our language is called the mother tongue because the father never gets a chance to Speak, that Is, very niceCharacter: When I joke they take it seriously. When I am serious they take as a joke..updatig stability: I don't know!world background: What kind of place is this? It's beautiful: Pigeons fly, women fall from the sky! I'm moving here!
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The orginal work is really well made, however, the translator who worked on this novel should really be scorned and removed from translating any other novels. He was super lazy and ruined the novel by skipping huge portions out of laziness. He really disrespected the author by half assing this translation and expecting ANY sort of payment.
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