story is great but you should use commas and punctuation marks brackets etc and make it more Readable overall it is nice I will support you with power stones so keep it up bro
REVIEWNarration: Decent and immersiveWorldbuilding: Vast and detailedCharacter development: Nice and steadyCharacter design: OutstandingDialogues: Realistic and LifelikePacing: Not fast nor too slowWriting quality: MagnificentExecution of the Genre: Good pitchStory potential: HighUpdating Stability: SteadyMESSAGEI am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) ?
very good writing quality that could be further enhanced by changing how you write his thoughts,world background much known but nothing bad presently, character design is very good just needs more depth.
Please get picked, sounds like the only interesting one.
Superior product × trash = trash
It is.like, 99×0=0
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Great story... Fantastic character... And good background.. You should add another system holder or another transmigrator... Or reincarnater..
Love the story so far, thanks.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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Heheheh keep going author san
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currently chapter 55. I think it's still worth trying............................................................................................................................................
Excelente livro irmão[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]