There isn't much so far, but it's good and the updates are solid, even though it's January, the story is good. To be honest, I know almost nothing about F1, but I'm enjoying it. I only have one criticism regarding the use of AI, in the first chapters, especially in the interaction with the father and everything else.
Some of my biggest issues with this story are the weird slang the voice chick uses, the pacing and the MC. Slam donkeys? Pay pigging? Those terms make me cringe! The story picks up pace after the fourth chapter and before that, things are really slow. The funniest part so far was the thong scene in chapter five and that's it. The author constantly brings up the MC's hair and weight and constantly makes fun of him for it. Those jokes get old fast. Ben reminds me of Michael Scott but younger and self-aware of the fact that people don't like him. I like comedic stories where bad things happen to an unlikable protagonist (i.e. Dwight Schrute in The Office) but this story didn't make me laugh much
i highly enjoyed reading this novel, didnt find anything that made me feel troubled. shame it was not continued since months.
and shame i had to write this sentence just so i had enough letters to post that review.
Hey there. I've now dropped my review on your book to show well deserved support. I've been looking for an interesting book for a while.
You are amazing.
RAW Name please??
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I really love your work, please continue this one. It was getting better in later chapters, please don't drop this unlike the 1st one.
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REVIEW
Narration: Decent and immersive
Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed
Character development: Nice and steady
Character design: Outstanding
Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike
Pacing: Not fast nor too slow
Writing quality: Magnificent
Execution of the Genre: Good pitch
Story potential: High
Updating Stability: Steady
MESSAGE
I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean)
Wowowowow this is really a diamond in the rough!! Near the level of The Oracle Paths, one of my favorites! It sucked me in from like chapter 7 and i haven’t stopped reading since.
Story is about magic, first and foremost and MC is talented and exceptional, though he definitely has to work for what power he gets. Magic is hella interesting and the twists and turns are actually surprising!
Really like the characters so far, with only minimal one dimensional characters. KEEP IT UP AUTHOR!!
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You have a potentially good story. I would suggest you write a bit of world-building because I am confused about the setting of the story. is it in China or somewhere else? I would like to see descriptions of places and characters. I also would advise you to look up how to write in the active tone of voice instead of passive. this story has some grammar issues. other than that keep up the good work.
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