I don’t like romance nor female lead, although it seems you have male lead too (unless I read that wrong). Your story has potential and interesting, especially since you have a mystery aspect to it. The mystery is what brings people into the story. You have grammar mistakes, especially a lot of places that need commas. Remember, commas make a difference and the story flow better. Without the commas, it is like everything is together. Other than that, your story has potential, keep up the good work!
I came here because it has the same author of Fate of Asertia and I never thought that i'd get hooked by this one as well. A totally different story and it's so refreshing. The comedy the action and the characters of this story are very much like a high schooler would do. I almost forgot that this is a revenge story and I kinda couldn't wait to see more of it.