Thanks for the one who writes this story....it's good that I find such interesting and full of adventure story,I read it like there's no tomorrow for it's fun,like the characters so much..
Just waiting for more updates!!!
I've been looking forward to the prequel to LWS. I'm sure I'll enjoy it as much as I enjoyed what I have read so far from LWS. Keep it up, you have my support!
This is Brandon gould I am responding to a review swap for this book so you can give a review on my book.
First off I think it is a good book and I liked the chapters I read, But in my own opinion I think your MC is a Gary Stew. A Gary Stew is the male version of a Mary Sue.
Now I read up to the fourth chapter. I think the world you created is very unique and interesting.
Your MC can be overpowered but he needs weakness. I think he is a gary stew is because he has no flaws,
Your MC is God and you have made a MC that can't die, or loss must pepole would find that type of MC boring.
A Overpowered MC can be done you just got to let the bad guys beat up your MC and give him some weakness
Just giving my opinion
Hope to see that review
I really like it, because i love baseball but because i love story.
An excellent work of lust and love. Makes you think if having a power like Melvin had will be a boon or bane... It leaves a very good afterthought... Nice writing bro.. ????
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I don't know about this one
The first 100 chapters or so are really good, with interesting characters and world design. The plot holes and unrealistic actions of those in this cultivation world gets progressively worse though, the author clearly understands how a cultivator world should be and tries to change it to make everything feel more modern both in the culture and the way everyone reacts. This doesn't work very well, it instead makes the world and the people in it feel shallow and dragged along by random desicion making. The plot and idea behind it is really good though and I was really interested in how it would go throughout the "Tutorial" he was in. But alot of the systems and feature are disregarded or make no sense and destroy the story. My biggest gripes were the loyalty system and how he supposedly rewrites the " yin slaves" memories but that left their personalities cause otherwise they would be boring. WHICH the author correctly writes them as just that, slaves with no control but some personality. Later though the author has some character's completely disregard their loyalty stat and the fact they are yin slaves who aren't supposed to be able to betray or harm their master unless ordered to in extremely obnoxious and plot hole inducing stupity that adds drama and moves the story along by disregarding everything mentioned before in the story.All in all, the author somehow took a good story and characters up to the 70~chapter mark and then started adding plot holes, contradicting himself and making shallow characters that make random decisions that anyone can tell are forced into the story to make the story move in a different direction.