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Menurut saya novel ini bagus banget, alur cerita menarik, unsur komedi dapet, gaya penulisan mudah di pahami, tapi menurut saya perkembangan hubungan mc dgn heroin terkesan cepat ( tapi ya gk masalah sih ) , hmm kurang lebih seperti itu.
Yah intinya jangan ampe drop / hiatus thor di tunggu kelanjutanya :)
Sounds sloppy and not well thought out. It sounds nice to have the full support of digital phone services in an ancient world, but that just seems distracting and then inconvenient to get invested into.
To much convoluted and artificial plot. Feels forced. Let us try another novel.
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Ok first off, I’m really enjoying this. I’ve always enjoyed stories centred around shops and their op managers. Now onto my only complaint. Are you ready? Ok. Why did you have to end it when I just here wanting more!
This story has a lot of potential. Exciting action, wonderful indepth world building, and everything gets revealed part by part without knowledge cramming and very naturaly. Author is very responsive and his subtile clues are just enough to make you analize and at least partially guess what will happen after a clif wich does not make it boring actually it makes you even more invested and the feeling when you nearly guess is very exhilarating. 10\\10 book with a lot of potential and very responsive author recommend for every fantasy or magical lover
I've just started, but it's very interesting so far! The worldbuilding is great, and I really like the idea of having two elements. The author also does a great job of introducing new characters.
There are grammar and tense errors, but in terms of helping the reader visualize what's going on, the writing quality is better than 95% of what's on this site.
I'm giving it a 4.6, but with a good copy editor it would easily go up to a 5.
After reading some chapter's I gotta say I really enjoy your Story and it's curing me of my boredom on Webnovel. There aren't that many Stories that revolve about a Nobody that becomes someone Great. This Story has lots of potential I hope you don't mess it up.
With that said I will continue reading and give more Reviews in the Future.
There are only a few chapters right now, but they are great. The characters are likeable and mostly relatable. There are moments where I obviously can't connect with the MC, but that's to be expected considering his past. Let's just hope he will be able to leave his past life behind and start a new one with friends and family. (Author please don't crush my hopes lol) Can't really say much more because of the low number of chapters right now, but I have high expectations. This novel will definitely stay in my library.
Give it a read, it's worth it.
Just let the evil mc take over just cant bear to read the wimpy mc either merge them or just kill off the wimpy one ............................
my prognosis is to leave this novel alone, the synopsis is a straight up lie and the storytelling is bland and forced. the content to him getting his power up is skipped, his first loss is skipped. the storytelling principle of show dont tell is simply ignored. small spoiler-> rough plot directionthe female lead is shoved to the mcs arms almost instantly, without any real content except her having a system which forces her to give herself to him against her own will. this seems like a not so much thought out power fantasy.i do have to say that the synopsis really sounded exciting, so this is a huge disappointment...
It's a fan fiction right so why is it in this section and finally as its a ff why the heck chapters are locked. Finally is it a ff or not