Alot of Grammer mistakes and story narration is not that great. But every scene is told in detail in simple words. It will be better with more grandik words and lesser Grammer mistakes. All the best
Some editing would be nice. Would have kept reading but by chapter 3 I was more skimming the chapter. It has potential though so keep it up. Just remember to prof read.
Let me just say, the synopsis was really good ? I like the start of the first chapter, but it kind of gets confusing with the name changes.
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Story has got an interesting synopsis. The writer has done a great job on developing the story. The few chapters I've read are intriguing and very captivating. The writer has done an amazing job.
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Fuking hilarious please dont worry about writing inconsistencies because the story is already good so you dont need to worry about re-writing it
This is a wonderful story with a pretty unique idea. Everything is very well explained (such as characters, world, etc.) and the story progress is also nice. Not too fast and not too slow. It's perfect in nearly every aspect. It has a lot of potential and I wish luck to the author ?Keep writing!
I like this novel very much . I think the story is fast but it is also good. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️???????????????????????????
I loveee action and magic stories.?it gives me peace?️ like I am in their world.......Author has done great work hope she / he get more fame❤️u200d?❤️u200d? keep it up......It's an amazing book!!!!! ?❤️
Great job. The synopsis is intriguing and enough to make anyone want yo read the story. There aren't any grammatical errors. I don't have any complaints. Keep on writing!
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