good story hoping mc be seme. like the concept, I had a similar concept once with mermen and apocalypse but I could not think of a definite plot. thank you for the story. hoping for more. And make the mc seme and the ml would be shocking shou/uke. *giggles*
The system idea is novel but mc becomes op too fast. There was no story development, no essence. Not for me. Ggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg.
good thread but distroyed it perfectly.
mc has no commonsense . writing is very bland. feel sleepy... nothing new in this novel..if this is your first gaming novel you can try read few chapters..
very interesting story the plot is amazing, the protagonist's personality is great i really liked it and her development is amazing and this is the best for this world, the harem honestly very interesting I really liked the personality of the heroines
So, Novel with another system
Amazing Novel ........................................................When I read the novel, I don't know what I'm reading. I don't understand what author writing.
Hello author!
Good writing skills!
I have read this book and it is very different And unique concept to the other novels I have read about fiction. This can surely hold readers interest.
here are some of my suggestions That I like to recommend So your book can be more appealing ;
-you can use Grammarly For improving your writing.(webnovel also suggest you to use that!)
-And upload Your content daily.(as you are doing and send it on diffrent platforms for promotion to attract more reader base)
That ‘s it. I hope you can take into account my suggestions regarding your work.
Here is my 5 stars not only for your plot but also for your courage to write. As an author I also know it’s Hard to take first steps so I wish you to be a successful Writer.
Keep it up!
The system is not OP, and MC shown a lot of wit in every plot progression. Plot armour is not even easily earned, he got it through a rather interesting plan.
Lastly, the novel comedic is fueled by characters with brain unlike the other novel.
This is certainly underrated.
this is literally a copy paste of "my vampire system", it like reading the opposite of my vampire system where the mc got stronger when expose to light bruh
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The story its not bad apart from a few things that should be changed the first its the stability of the releases its just too slow this story for sure its long but with this slow release after some time a lot of people would drop it
Read everything so far, due to that cover... Cough Cough
Anyway, it's quite the good read, and quite interesting as well. Story is super B, and im already loving that loli vampire just after chapter 1. Author has a good imagination, and is able to tell a very good to read story.
HOWEVER
there's the problem of grammar, which often appears in conversations, in which the author isnt able to properply indicate if the MC or someone else is talking, or him thinking. grammar usually gets messed up when author tries to explain a conversation that is ongoing, especially in the first chapter. it rarely appears on the later chapters though, and mostly in the longer chapters.
Im assuming the author is just tired from writing kekeke
anyway, other that that, I really love the story this novel tells. All I need is more uploads! And please fix chapters one, or you might lose potential readers author sama!
To anyone about to read this novel, read it! its really good, and only need some fixing in the long chapters. grammar, punctuations, and indications