I'm not on the current chapter yet but I just felt like I definitely had to give a review on this amazing work. Characters are great, kinda reminds me of some anime XD. Imma stick with it till the end.
Good job author, keep it up.
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Hiya! Attached is a breakdown of my review:
Writing Quality 4/5: Noticed a few grammar errors here and there, some that I commented on, some that I didn't. I think some (like the missing period) should be catchable after a few proofreads.
Update Stability 5/5: Not much to comment on there. Honestly the length of the chapters are super impressive.
Story Development 4/5: I think you're aware of the issue since I noticed you mentioning this in the author's comments. I think it might be because I don't really read ML novels that much, but the first few chaps made me feel a bit overwhelmed. Especially with all the names being tossed around, some parts took a few rereads for me to get a grasp on what was happening.
Character Design 5/5: Seems super detailed so far!
World Background 5/5: This category took my breath away! The first few paragraphs describing the world literally gave me chills ahahaha. Your descriptions are probably your greatest strength, so I would say try to couple that with the action and the info a bit more so that there's more of a balance.
Overall super good moods you set! Like it definitely matched what I expected after seeing your cover lel
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Wow! It's an interesting and amazing story with a captivating plot! I like the way you described the scenarios! Like it a lot! Hope to see more of the good work!
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This is absolutely great Highly recommend it, hits most the marks. The only problem i have with it is how he gets a extra girl And i absolutely hate harems unless their done in a specific way, although that part is my opinion. Cya ;p
alright now this book is ruined. I don't know why authors have to introduce love life in novels with these type of concepts. I think without love it would've been a wonderful novel. the girl is clearly forcing herself on Shawn for no reason at all. Then all that cringey blushing and all it gives me goosebumps. are these authors loners in real life and do not know women I mean they totally show that girls are like cats with curiosity they like to do whatever they want.
I know this story will go downhill but still is readable. Too ostentatious. read it only if you have nothing else to read. old-timers who can not find anything good to read can definitely read it once at super speed as it does not have much fanfare. Only 25 chapters in, this is just at the boundary of being trashed.
it's good? nowill I keep reading this? probablyWebnovel's standard of quality is so low lately that if novels aren't complete trash, I'm reading them.If this novel had been published a few years ago, I wouldn't have looked twice.
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Tsk tsk, you must go worship Fang Yuan. If you dare screw him over, you are simply courting death. Good work making use of the unexplained lotus people, my theory is that was Spectral Soul and Red Lotus collaborating in sealing the immortal zombie and not provoking heaven will or just an arrangement.