Greetings, this is the author again. This story is actually done, so you will be reading a novel with an actual ending. I did, however, end it in a way that I could continue it if ever I wished to-- just in case enough readers request it.This story is very close to my heart, as it is actually the first ever book that Webnovel took a liking to enough to have it contracted. I was a literal newbie in writing when I wrote this story, but I hope you like it as much as I loved writing it. Thank you!
Over all writing quality is good with very few grammar errors. Story development is pretty good. You can't really predict what will happen next so far and it is enjoyable to read. Character development is also really good they each have unique personalities and some even have different ones so to speak depending on various situations. Update stability was good it's been 3days since the last update so I don't know if he is taking a break or what. world background is pretty dam good so far all things considered for how few chapters there are and how he has not even fully explored the island yet!
This novel is great so far. The characters have their own personality going for them, and the world seems to have a vast history. Perhaps you can further explore the relationships that the MC has with the worlds. I can see that this has a lot of potential, so I hope it doesn't get dropped anytime soon.
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I rather enjoy the pace at which this story takes place, as it is at the time of writing this review. It gave me enough info of the setting and characters to be intrigued in a succinct fashion, character descriptions and the general language used is creative and entertaining, and the scenario posed in this story is thrilling and totally unique to me. I fully intend to keep reading as updates continue.
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While I'd like to give it 4 stars, unfortunately, I can't do things like 4.5 or 3.5. So things that are a bit above 4 stars are averaged down to just 4, and things that are only a little bit below 4 are stuck all the way down at 3.
Writing Quality: The actual writing only has minor grammatical errors and very few mistakes, overall sitting at a much higher standard than what is typically found on the website. Though that's not to say it doesn't have an excessive amount of repetitive word choices, strange sentence construction, and unnatural dialogue. Things that simply don't make much sense are often stated as well. The author also tends to over-use exposition, especially through character dialogue that has no sensible context for being said. The author tends to over-repeat details, such as how strong or rare guardians are, through the use of characters that are all already completely aware of this, though I will more than admit my own work has this flaw as well. I will note they have exceptional use of unique wording. Many people still like the writing, so don't let my review deter you.
Stability of Updates: Pretty good, the fact that someone asked if the author was okay in a review due to a mere 3-day gap in releases should tell you a lot.
Story Development: Meh, it develops as expected, there are plenty of tired cliches and obvious set-ups/outcomes. It's not bad, I want to make that clear, just nothing too special. Enough background information is explained (if not overly, and forcibly, explained at times) to make most of the writing choices seem logical. The pacing is fairly good as well, taking time to set up characters and setting before diving into the meat of the story.
Character Design: Pretty good, the amount of random expository dumps characters give in almost completely unrelated sentences can throw off their believability, and a lot of their dialogue is clunky or weirdly constructed. A lot of their motivations and decisions are explained well enough to make sense, and they don't often behave in unbelievable or overly stupid ways for the sake of the plot. The main thing making them feel like characters rather than people, is the sheer amount of seemingly forced, almost completely unnecessary exposition the author often has them spout through dialogue rather than utilizing a narrative third-person perspective. There are also a lot of 'fake smart' moments in this book, where characters (typically the protagonist) suddenly gain insight into something with no actual setup that would even remotely lead them to the conclusion they're portrayed as smart for reaching. For example; The characters are given time to look through a shop-like system in their menu and buy items before heading into the tutorial, and the MC somehow determines that they're doing this to test how they handle pressure, off of absolutely nothing but the fact they were allowed to buy items before heading into combat, and this is portrayed as a moment of the main character being extremely deductive and intelligent. It comes off as insincere.
World Background: Again, my biggest issue here is that the author occasionally over-does the exposition. The world is fleshed out as much as it needs to be for the story and is handled fairly believably. Though a few aspects come off as illogical, such as the story noting 'governing' alongside technology, and etc improving due to people entering monoliths, when there really isn't any logical way this would happen, unless the monoliths are dropping books on governance from superior alien civilizations or the like.
Overall worth a read, I know most people here don't have very stringent standards for writing quality, and this is certainly an above-average novel on the sight. So go nuts!
1. I got a dig bick
2. You that read wrong
3. You read that wrong too
4. You checked
5. You smiled
7. You are wandering why you are still reading this
8. You saw that mistake, right?
(On 7)
10. But did you see that I skipped 6?
10. You checked
11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 9
12. I said "saw you" not you saw
13. I also skipped 2
14. You got tricked
15. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading!
Make a list of people you think would be completely unworthy to have a scientific - research and development based - system.
Who is the number 1 on your list?
The protagonist is the number 1 (most inadequate) person you could possibly think of. He gets the system.
The world is crazy (not in the good way). The protagonist is better off in a coma. There's no reason to read this rubbish.
Boring parody of Profane Prince of Domination
It took the author 200+ chapters to finish the story in the first city. (It was very boring)
if you want a strong MC this book is not for you, you better re-read Profane Prince of Domination
The number of power stones shows that this is a very sad story.
I'm happy with my work! It's very good!
If you disagree, you're just wrong! (for legal reasons this is a joke)
But anyway, if you have criticisms and things you think that are better changed, this is the prime time to voice it! The novel's short enough so I can actually fix stuff easily! (but please don't think I'll do anything you ask of me!)
When the novel becomes too long, I'll never change anything ever so don't lose your chance!
do we reall need another this bs
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