True Space Mage is a rather refreshing story among all the copy-pasted web novels around. It tries to build its own unique world with lots of layers and mysteries, and it establishes a logical magic system that still allows endless possibilities. Truly a breath of fresh air if you're used to novels that keep reusing the same few settings over and over again.
The main character, Aaron, also feels much more like a human than most protagonists. Despite his reincarnation advantages, there are always challenges waiting for him. He hesitates, makes mistakes, falls into slum**, and struggles against inner demons; through all of this, however, he slowly grows as a person and a mage.
Sadly, while the ideas might be good, the actual writing... isn't. I'm not just talking about the technical aspects, the grammar, and whatnot (though a proofreader is definitely needed as well), but the overall plot and character development. It doesn't feel like the author has much of a plan, which ends up seriously harming the novel. It's what makes Aaron simultaneously one of the best and worst things about the story.
As I said previously, Aaron's humanity makes him a compelling character, but only when the writer knows what they're doing. The problem here is that it's hard to get a good grasp on his character. He repeats mistakes even though he should have gotten over them already; he is supposed to be smart, but keeps getting dumbed down so that the plot moves in certain ways; he improves dramatically in many aspects, but still makes newbie blunders; his motivations are sometimes fuzzy and hard to understand.
Many of these problems could be improved with forethought and planning. If say, character X (readers will know who I'm talking about) will be important in the future, then take some time to establish their relationship with Aaron; don't just suddenly add some drama involving X when neither the reader nor the main character has much reason to care about them. Maybe it makes sense in theory, but you need to *show* us these things, not just *tell* them. Give them more scenes, more characterization.
Also, you need to give some thought to the main character's progression if you want to avoid testing the reader's patience. If he failed, learned his lesson, and became stronger, then move on. Don't keep retreading old ground unless you can add something genuinely new and interesting. Writing realistic, deeply flawed protagonists takes some serious writing skills, especially in a web novel, which we often read for easily digestible stories. So I would advise anyone to start ******.
All in all, it could still be an enjoyable read for people who enjoy magic and worldbuilding. That's mostly what kept me hooked, at least. But the writing has much to improve and could hugely benefit from an editor, since the actual story falls short from what it could have been.
Amazing book!.
At first it will be slow paced but the plot and the characters are wonderful!
I recommend this to fellow readers!
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it's sooo boring. I mean other then unwanted info dumps and fillers there is nothing in this.
At this point I like everything, it's intriguing how the guy will handle everything.
Another original addition to qi.
Sounds different from all the cultivation or op no fks given mc out there
There seems to be some real plot going in the background
why would that successful guy want to kill himself ?
whats that white demon ?
The immortal doesnt know he is immortal ?
oh and there is no cultivation or any kind of power system
and it seems the author is influenced by Japanese culture to have names like those
hopefully we will have updates soon
You will have to start paying at chapter 11 but the main character is still unconscious. Why do I have to pay even though I haven’t even heard the main character thoughts
Idea of the story is intriguing but the English really diminishes the quality significantly. What's more, there's way too much dialogue and the fact that exposition is not used to describe what is going on also makes it a pain to read.
If your character is tired, then describe how he is tired, not say "*in a tired voice*" and be done with it, that's just lazy and unprofessional.
There's also no indication of who is speaking most of the time so you're left wondering who is talking and the lack of exposition also makes the characters look boring. I'm here to read a story, not to uncover the mysteries of what you're writing. If I have to spend extra effort to understand what you're writing, then I might as well not read it.
A great book from a great author. It's been great so far. Zeno cheating death, getting a powerful side chick and main chick too. The world building at the beginning was great too. Character design and introductions are lit too. I just think you need to work a bit on the pacing. It's a great book.
Hlo fellow novel readers, this is great and good novel with everything fromWriting to story. But is has far too less chapters for me, as I already have caught with latest chapters. Can anyone recommend more novel like this as I only have one in my mind. But it also just started and has less chapters but got a great potential. If you wannna check it out. Don’t forget to like my review if you find that story good.NameHolographic Conjuring SyatemHey, don,t forget my like on this review. This book got 2 chapters for now but still great so far.
Awesome story..not arrogant like I will kill you if you touch me MC, MC is kind hearted low profile caring helping, I really
like the story and will highly recommend to read it just too amazing.
And I hope in the future MC wont change much like too arrogant or killing unnecessarily.
only regret is I have to wait for more chapters to get released.
Why I discovered this gem too early not after atleast 100-200chapters
i accidentally click on this when I wanted to go to vote and I read the summary and found it interesting and I read the part then I realized this is actually quite a good it's better than I am a mighty lion. I stopped reading trial reads a while back because webnovel keeps picking trash novels and most of these trashy novels get picked while others are dropped so I'm just here to show my support and hope that this will be picked and continued.