Way better then I expected from trial read and it's novel title/synopsis. The character doesn't get an instant oh I have 100% block or 100% damage reflection passive instantly.
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This story was a fun read until Leonel never followed through with his ideas or goals. I waited for him to upgrade his brother's abilities with Black Star until they enterd a realm where it became pointless. I waited for him to revive anyone in the silver tablet until it became to late. I waited for him to use the womb and Gold Fish until his realm was to high for it to matter. I waited for Black Star to grow into a decent character. I waited for Lionel to share dimensional cleanse with Aina or his brothers but he never doas. I waited for Aina to help point out areas where his brothers could focus on to improve but nothing. I waited on him to help his brothers but he just does the bar minimum for them to improve. this Story is just Leonel jumping from crisis to crisis and him thinking he'll help but then he never followes through.
It’s a good relaxing read .
It’s not some high quality adventure story with twist and turns, but a straight OP MC sight seeing your while farming enemies . Its very relaxing and good change of pace . Romance a little bit forced in 2 sentences and. It happening for more then that.
Still I enjoy it . Good change .
This story is just another great story that our author made! Can’t wait to see more of this story! It’s going to be great reading this, wonder what the future chapters of this story will be like?
Very good nice :)
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(1+3+1+3+2)/5=2
The author's trying to put a novel together and mixing troupes from this and other genres.
that's alright.
and the author tries to be a chill dude who keeps in touch with his work and new comers.
so being honestly critical starts to feel a little hard.
The editing honestly hurts. for any defenders of this English; alright, we grew up with a completely different version of English. This doesn't match my experience with either American, British, Australian English or any other.
I'm slightly confused as the few replies to my comments from the author led to me believing that he/she actually doesn't have a problem with English.
side note if anyone is interested in a bit of reality. a woman who deals with stress for any amount of time wilts. The same goes for men. in other words they lose their aesthetic and raw sexual appeal. For a story and a fantasy's sake, i can see and mostly agree that it doesn't matter.
I have however seen this so much that I'm now tired of it.
stay healthy folks.
It rarely happens to me that I don't understand a book at all.
Is this supposed to be comedy? A tragedy? A lesson?
Maybe the jokes and recognizable quotes got lost in translation.
I really would like to know what this book is supposed to be, what message it is trying to send.
Can't even review this properly, Characters are stereotypes so far and MC is a non-entity.
World Building is not there, normal World, all consequences of an Immortal just casually walking around are ignored.
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Amazing writing skills
I'm not professional reviewer so if I like it I will give it 5 stars. There are some minor grammar error here and there but overall it's good novel. Hope to see more soon.
honestly it's pretty terrible because the story background changes to much. for example in the 1 or 2 chapter the mc had parents but then in the next chapter the mc parent had died and suddenly had a sister. also I feel like it drags out a scene to long. but other than that it's a good concept just needs to go back to the drawing board .