It's my first time reading a novel , I'm glad I came across with this masterpiece . It gave me the reaction I longed for . I don't know about flaws , this novel is perfect , at least for me . 10/10
Thank you, this is a very good novel, worth reading, lots of suspense, plot is well written. It evokes a lot of different feelings - sweetness, sadness, thrills, fear, sympathy, and more...thank you very much, more power to the author, can be a good script for a movie. :-)
read this novel. my affection just went to the villain’s. no one born evil. if they are have received equal affection from family and protected very well by parents maybe they grow up be a good person and find they own happiness and not try to rob someone else and do evil's things to fill the emptiness.for ML and FL I don’t really feel admire to them. true two lifetime time they face half they life is sad but they still have better ending compared to the villains. there still have caused and effects in life. everything is just about seeking for the truth what happened in they life. if the ML look for the truth at the beginning about who’s his biological father since his father in name don’t like him and questioned who’s his real father. will he act so nobles and don’t know himself as a magpie occupied dove nest? eat someone’s else food and took someone else wealth which all of it not belong to him. if he knows the truth and act right at his place and be friendly with the villains. don’t look down full disdain to the villains maybe they will grow up as good brothers. for F villains she also a sad one. there no family affection in herlife. her parents not treat her equally and her brother just blame her as selfish person. she know how to repent herself and on the end when she went to prison she just accepts she’s guilty and take her punishment after she knows the truth. she just look for something in her life, wish to be loved. I think her brother on the end still treat her unfair when he says she is selfish but not tell her the truth even after they grow up, her bring just think FL mental health problems but never noticed about her mental health problems. just thinking since she is sensible child but never notices how the villain emotions. FL she’s just thinking her sorrows know the roots but she never apologized for her selfishness. how she feel because her selfishness causes her parents dead? and create evil sister. she’s not a sensitive person to her brother and sister. the only thing deducted my point from the female villains is she not a good mother. I just wish the villains can have another life story when they can avoid misfortune and grow be a good peoples and have nothing to do with they family.
"tong wei" an example of a piece of shtty sht sht and btchy kind of girl that will immediately disappear the moment she sees her first love even though shes almost engaged to the mc good god she didn't and i hope she wouldn't become mc wife
This story need more buzz, promotion, advertisement, whatever it is, but need to be share to as many people as possible! It's that good!I read it because it's completed and very short, but I didn't expect it to be so good. It put tears to my eyes, and clench my heart, in a good way of course. Dear comment reader, read this short story, you won't regret it
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still need an improvement but the characters are good for me it's just that the plot and story still need more push
I am liking how the back story has been given. It's not in hurry and not lenthy as well. In fact very specific and perfect. Now i am just waiting for present part to come.
MC has god complex, thinking and acting as if he's the most superior and all of humanity is like his pet slaves
Qidian China Stats:
Rating: Not Rated /// Chapters: 101 (finished)
Years written: 2003 /// 82.32 million clicks
Tags: sports, football
This is Lin Hai Ting Tao's first work. Also by him: Godfather Of Champions
YESS They uploaded it !! i waited for so long, they shouldn't have deleted the chapters on gravitytales before uploading it here, that's mean T.T Please keep up the translation, don't drop it ><
Great novel by the way
There's a problem with the writing. The english itself is fine, but the pacing, focus, and rational are all sub-par.
Pacing - There are 3 chapters before the official chapter 1 that are glossaries of terms and information about the world, and this is a definite red flag. 1) This is a terrible way to start a story. I don't want to do homework in order to read a novel for leisure. 2) If this is neccessary to understand the story, then you have failed as a writer. You need to show the audience, not tell them. That's the difference between a story and a textbook. 3) Revealing all these details is a part of storytelling. Dumping them all in the beginning simply means you can't use their revelation to further your story. Discovering things with the MC is one of the joys of reading a book, and now you've robbed us of that experience to some extent. 4) By talking about the X levels of your world and how people struggle to climb them, you not only told us the end point of your story, but informed us that we're going to have to read what is basically the same story X times. Another mystery dead and a promise of an endlessly repetitive story.
Focus - You need to trim the fat. Details, such as the fact that the MC came in his pants after his first feeding, either need to be cut out or utilized to further the narrative. I believe you were attempting to show how overwhelming of an experience his first feeding was, but you didn't go into enough detail for this fact to be anything other than a distraction. You basically skimmed through the fact that he was exhausted, breezed through his emotional state, and then described in detail the tent in his pants and the stain from his ejaculation. 1 graphic detail amongst a few brief ones sticks out like a sore thumb, and just because it's about a sexual organ doesn't make your novel more "*****."
Rational - "Because the information might put you in danger" is not a constructive reason to deny a amnesiac character information about THEMSELVES. That's basically saying "because the author doesn't want the audience to know." You talk about enemies and danger as if covering your eyes will somehow make them go away. All it does is render the MC helpless to avoid these dangers and force him to stumble face first into them due to ignorance.