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what a story he really brings it to life
I love this novel
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The story was quite good I like how he picked up his life...there is so much to learn in this story. it's a must-read.
l like the Leon character a lot.
keep it up, dear.....
Sangat bagus tidak ada pilih kasih dalam ras. Biasanya yang saya liat tentang penciptaan mc selalu bilang dia akan netral tapi banyak yang nelayan ludahnya sendiri
Man the characters are so one-dimensional like they have no personality of their own man. The MC is stupid and basically has no goals and there are a lot of inconsistencies with some characters actions and also their ages
Its good. Compared to other "reborn as dungeon monster" narratives, it's miles ahead. Unlike other novels which make the MC spend 75% of the novel in the dungeon, we've been out for a while now.The start isn't that special, but it doesn't take long for things to get interesting. Inner monologues of characters, including the MC, help narrate their own understanding of themselves. You can read about their actions and come to understand that yourself earlier, but, the author still has these narrations to help make the characters come to life. Its great. Later on these moments are even more vivid.The fights are not my favorite, but they are good. They do feel drawn out but also well paced. Weird. This novel won't end soon. Too many things to explore.
Ok so the story starts out as a transmigration with a system to ancient Poland. It's a good idea but the way it works out and is pretty boring and the main drawn of the system is barely used and not even defined.
Right now we know barely anything about the system. There is no info on how he levels if there are levels, we know he gets xp from crafting but I guess no xp when he kills anyone we dont know his stats but we know he has them. The whole system thing is laid out like a wiki, it gives him info and that's about it oh and it can auto brew. It is supposed to be able to craft for him but he never uses it but to make beer. I mean what is the use of a system if he doesn't use it or hell the author never defines what it actually is or what it can do totally or what ways he can get xp. So ya the system to me is just a hook to get people that like them to the story and just enough to seem like there is a system.
Just a few chapters in the romance entanglement starts which is crazy. The guy knows he only has a few months before the king runs away and all heck breaks loose and instead of setting stuff up thoroughly he spends 100 chapters play romance politics, yes het gets 2 towns out of it but damn 100 chapters of it and he has just made 1 brewery. I swear the author wants to have sex with his horse, he spends so much time describing the horse and putting his head to the horses you are just waiting from him to kiss the beast and way to much sex chapters for this type of story, I mean like 4 chapters to explain smut.
Anyway the story is a disappointment and it's about to go premium. I wish the guy luck but i dont think many readers will hang around, in my opinion it's not worth paying for. The guy puts a lot of work and research in but for what its supposed to be it's just disappointment.
Did anyone find the raw, even with chinese title+author's name and other novel
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ALL HAIL STEVE THE BUILDER
ALL HAIL STEVE THE BUILDER
ALL HAIL STEVE THE BUILDER
ALL HAIL STEVE THE BUILDER
ALL HAIL STEVE THE BUILDER
ALL HAIL STEVE THE BUILDER
ALL HAIL STEVE THE BUILDER
The constant mix of present tense and past tense is reallly realllllly annoying. And after reading like 4 chaps, I still don't know if you intended to write things in present tense or past tense.
Other than that, there's not much to badmouth regarding grammar.
As for WOrld and character design, they're very very interesting. Everything's explained in a quick, no-nonsense manner, and you can see the characters' personalities oozing out from the pages.
Some passages read in a bit of an exaggerated manner to emphasize plot points and character traits, but it's nothing too overbearing.
As for story dev, I rly can't say much at this point in the novel