The story is over all nice and my favourite character is i guess you know but i want to told you separately that it's ~~~~larry oh my he is so cool pleased to write and i want more chapters
Reviewed at chp157:
TLDR: It's not bad but neither is it good. It's a good read to kill time but not for me. I dropped it after powering through 100+chps. I think the weakest aspects of this novel are going to be the MC or the plot. Still, I recommend to anyone interested to give it a try. Some of you might enjoy it ✌️
WQ(4/5) - Very few grammar and spelling mistakes. Readable and decently written.
SD(2/5) - Premise was interesting though the story development was subpar. Quite a few cliches and unfortunately far too many inconsistencies to ignore. Academy arc is quite boring imo. Overused cliches are fine as long as it's used well and presented in an interesting way. However, this was not the case here.
CD(3/5) - I appreciate that author didn't want some Pokemon harem and actually tried to create interesting characters. However that took a dive once he hit the academy arc, I honestly think it's cause of the typical cliches found thus requiring some characters to be typical young master or damsel-in-distress archetypes.
Now for the MC, oh boy, he's not evil but also not a goody two shoes, he's basically an average Joe who is actually rather pleasant. He's also a typical 'nice guy' in the romance department. Unfortunately it just seems MC doesn't learn from his mistakes and keeps mouthing off which causes him unnecessary drama and trouble. While it has also been stated that his world is cruel and strength is supreme, he also does not really show much initiative to actually get stronger or perhaps the author misuses time skips where MC doesn't seem to get any stronger. His system is also quite nerfed and it doesn't help that he's very lax when it comes to getting points.
So while being in the academy, he doesn't truly require to be much stronger, in the broader world, he's actually very weak. I'm fine with weak characters, what I'm not fine with is characters who stay weak, who doesn't 'try hard'.
US(4/5) - Author is consistent with updates and keeps interaction with audience. As this is his first novel, he's also very open to actual criticisms.
WB(3/5) - Hard to judge as it's not a fanfic with an established world setting and since it's still the academy arc as of this review, we have a limited world scope. The introduction to their power system and settings is done in the initial chapters to get readers acquainted and is interesting enough. The world building hasn't truly begun to me.
To the author:
Now for a first novel of the author, not bad, decent attempt. I'm sure you'll improve after this and I hope to see your future works but for now this novel ain't for me. I still wish you all the best author! Keep striving and improving, you have potential!
Good novel .............................................................................................................................................................................
I said in my previous review I'll edit the ratings I first gave so this is my edited review.First, the writing quality is 4/5, I can't use the MTL I read to rate this for its quality since I can't read chinese characters.Story development is 3/5, its not bad, but from what I can read, its not that good either, just the usual face slapping.Character design is 3/5 too, why? Because from what I can read, the characters other than MC and FL is generic, there are no depths.You may have noticed I am using "from what I can read" the reasonfor that is:update stability: 2/5, I don't know if author dropped it, or is in hiatus, but the last update was december 2021, and it ended at chapter 49, I don't know if webnovel have the chapter 50 and above, but yeah, 49 is the last update. I want to put 1/5 in there but because I don't know if webnovel have the rest, I will put 2 for now, will edit again if they have the rest of chapters.world build is 3/5, because from the chapters, you can't get enough info from the world the characters are living in.
All in all, a solid novel.There aren’t too many chapters so I can make a concrete review. However, from what I’ve read so far (30 chaps or so) I would say that it’s quite solid.The concept is fun, the dialogues are nice, and the world background is also slowly starting to take shape.That said, there are a couple of things that could improved.Firstly, not sure if it was just me, but at some point you used an emoji, and my laptop couldn’t read it, so I was confused for a bit.Could be just me, and it wasn’t really a big problem.The pacing is fine since the world is starting to take shape, so no problem there.Character is fine, but you what should be worked on more are side characters.They do feel alive, but it can be slightly improved. Just give them more unique quirks, and some motivation and goals to which they aspire to achieve.Anyhow, I really do like the story. Keep up the good work.(Original Review: Alekzi)
mtl or Raw please
I absolutely loved it. Amazing translation. It's a beautiful story so far. Will you be uploaded the remaining chapters?? Can you please at least send a link to the remaining chapters? I really want to read it. Thank you
For us authors, our own creations would always be the best and it is more biased. This is my novel for the WSA 2023, I hope that you would support it!If you have any suggestions and comment, you can freely comment and review my novel and I will take consideration of your opinions.I hope you will continue to support my novel. Thank you and God Bless!
This book is the reason I made a Webnovel account as well as downloaded the app just so I could show my support to the author of a true gem of a book
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Honestly a very good book that is worth trying out if you like the gaming genera. Has a very good start for having just been released.
Npc has to deal with the weirdos known as gamers as he tries to build his dungeon
Liked the chapters that are available. Hope that the author will pick the story back up. Am curious how the character would develop in the future.