Nice
This was a promising story that could easily get famous overtime it's a shame author isn't updating.............................................
Well this will probably turn out to be a good novel. But I will drop it since I do not like the MC since he is kinda evil which was portrayed in a funny way to make people laugh. In any case this novel is funny and you can give it try.
Worst Mc every seen . Even lin fan from strongest system know when to stop , but this MC has worst personality . No charisma . No usage of brain . And by seeing Mc , he seems to be 3rd rate bully/waste of a person in his past life
The book starts off ok the plot is a bit slow and cliche but was overall decent. that is until the fbi is brought in the mc becomes careless leaving all types of holes for him to be captured ..im not into reading about beta, soft hearted, or easy to manipulate mcs. Unfortunately the mc fits two of those categories. This is my main reason for dropping....good luck to the author
The very first thing that I noticed when I started to read this were the many grammatical errors. Normally if it's just a few, I wouldn't mind. However, there are enough errors that I had a hard time staying focused on the story itself. The grammar could use quite a bit of improvement. With that said... I do like the Author's creativity with the story. It's definitely something I'm not used to reading, but I would still encourage new readers to give the story a shot.
DO NOT BE TRICKED BY THE SYNOPSIS
While the synopsis is partially true, the tone of it is actually incorrect.
You'll understand the severity of the protagonists situation as a SPY in a FOREIGN NATION (no racism or anything in this novel here) where his colleagues could be killed off right in front of him with him only being able to watch.
READ THIS NOVEL!
It gets REALLLLY fucking good at 40+ chapter, I'm at 43 and I've already started writing a review because I WANT this novel to win.
Please read it.
It's a real gem.
Yeah, I mean...... Yes? No?
This novel is really a fifty fifty. Kingdom building novel where the mc has the ability to teleport to one world to the other. Like the sypnosis said the mc will be given the city without having to pay tribute.
So that means he is independant basically. So MC uses modern items to trade for money and uses that to build his own city for now.
In the 40 chapters he already fought several wars, albeit lackluster explained it really shows mc's retardness. I mean, how the f*ck? This guy really thinks that if he equiped (only about 1 month?) trained soldiers with advanced weapons like crossbows and better quality swords and catapults he can defeat someone's seasoned soldiers with number advantage?
Oh guess what? Of course he won! Like he got confidence defeating unorgansized bandits he think he can win against well trained armies? Just because he has better equipment? What, even his soldiers can adapt into modern formations? (In one month and even less).
And there's no explanation how he even got his weapons from the modern world, no interaction with the modern world at all!
Oh, forgot to say he's a huge f*cking hypocrite, or you could say the author is one cuz in this world there exist demi-humans. So mc accepts refugees and there are demi-humans mixed in with them. Well, he says he will give them equal rights but no, the demi-humans apparantly got less than normal humans. Wow, you change your damn mind faster than I beat my meat!
Translation - 5* (Smooth like the hands in my freezer~)
SoU - 5* (trial reads, always 5 stars)
Story development - 3* (I don;t know how to explain this, read it yourself)
Character design - 1* (Overconfident mc with retarded thinking)
World background - 3* (demi-humans and medieval technology/era)
Overall score 3.4
I am giving this five stars so I can be the first to do so, that is all. (also the book is cool too, so read that) . (this line is to fill up the required characters to post.)
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Its a fun read, lovin the hero. The pace is fantastic, lighting fast without missing any of the good stuff, so little filler. Fights are fun, characters varied, Still in its early stages, but volume one was a 5 star read.
It's been days since I started reading this novel, I still have a few more chapters to go. It was a fun read.
Writing quality: There's a few grammatical errors, some lacks punctuations and capitalizations. I was confused on who was saying some lines in the dialogues. After the author fixed these, it will be a smooth read for the readers. Need some editing for the scenes to flow naturally.
Character design: It's difficult for me to remember all the characters. But, I like their strengths. Marceus' power is cool!
World background: I want more background of their world, for me to fully connect to the novel.
Story development: A bit fast for me, eh? Need some breather scenes. Lol.
Stability of updating: You have wrote a lot of chapters, great job!
Best of luck, author!