Good novel
+ for World Background
( The author created a believable world that I hope gets even better as the story progresses, the idea of a magic system is at best mediocre, but it is getting a big plus for the consistency which is no small feat and the author can be quite proud of it.)
- for Character Design
( The protagonist is not that bad. I personally liked that you tried to give him some depth, but in the end he is like a bad side character, we know almost nothing about him and most of the character traits you tried to give him get forgotten after 5 chapters.
The side characters are all just not good , we have no rival , an antagonist that just appears in the middle of the story and a love interest that couldnt be more unimportant.
For real if I had to decide if the love interest or that random weaponsmith had to die , well you know who I would choose.)
I can also see that you improve yourself with every chapter written, the second arc is way better then the first and I really think you got talent.
Keep writing.
I love the novel, the first few chapters were lacking but it got better[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Author Note: I am writing as a hobby but I tried to do things professionally. Although I need to work on my grammar more, my story is still readable and written in detail.
I rate my review Writing Quality 3 stars because it is only average writing quality with quite a lot grammar mistakes. However, if I'm a person that just curing from dyslexia could read the novel without much difficulty, I'm sure other won't have it hard to read the story either.
My grammar needs improvement but I don’t have a teacher to teach me, so I don’t mind it if you rate me badly because of my grammar since I understand that it’s important for the reader to read the novel.
Just don’t expect for it to get any better if you don’t plan on helping me. Like I say, I don’t have a teacher to teach me grammar. I couldn’t see the mistake when I’m writing and re-reading so, you cannot hope for too much.
Stability of Updates, I must rate it 5 stars because 1 chapter a day and if there are a lot chapters in stock I will update 2-5 chapter on Sunday or sometimes on Saturday too. Its depend on my mood, really but it can never be lower than one chapter a day. So, I must say that it is as stable as translator translating an available novel.
Story Development 4 stars. Don't ask me why. I just liked how my story is developing. Why it lack one more star? Because it is not quite detail enough unlike professional novels.
Character design 4 stars. I love my characters, naturally 4 stars. Why it lack one more star? Similar to the above, it is not quite detail enough but in the future, I will improve on this surely.
World Background 4 Stars. No reason, just 4 stars.
Source of inspiration: Library of Heaven Path, History's Number 1 Founder, Tales of Demons and Gods
Disclaimer: I don't have the basic knowledge of Xianxia so do forgive me for that. I only know Xianxia from reading novels so my knowledge can be lacking. However, it is a certain that this novel is more of Xuanhuan than Xianxia.
That novel cover, I owned it. I'm the one that created it.
Warning: It is Yaoi. If you don’t like Yaoi, you can still read because I think that some Xianxia and Xuanhuan have acceptable BL moment too. If there is NSFW scene I will warn beforehand.
There will be a rate for Yaoi moment. One star to five stars. If it is too explicit, I will rate it five stars, if it just both men being naked but did nothing, I will rate it one star.
If you hate Yaoi, then please, I’m politely escorting you out of my novel.
Don’t ruin the review just because you hate Yaoi.
You may ask whatever you want to ask in this review but make sure to be polite to everyone.
Give it a read. It's different (compared to the avergaes out here), and it has a good start. Hope it remains that way.
Give it a read. It's different (compared to the avergaes out here), and it has a good start. Hope it remains that way.
Give it a read. It's different (compared to the avergaes out here), and it has a good start. Hope it remains that way.
Now. In at not be TheStatsGuy or TheImmortalPotato, but I can tell you a few things.
This is one of the most original and refreshing books I have ever had the pleasure of reading。So, take my word when I tell you that this book has everything a novice reader, or a bored pro can look for. You may not like it at first like I did, but just read 10 chapters in. I can gauruntee you will get hooked, I’ll bet 666 Spirit Stones on it.
Bro the moment you put austronesian empire here in chapter 2 I am already hyping to read this.
Too much filler, come on make the highlight for the system.
This is dope..
Everytime the curiosity to read the next chapter peaks..
I'm literally attached with this novel emotionally..
One of the best novel I've read till now..
The best thing about this novel is - It is based on real life.. That makes it realistic ♥️
Story seems interesting af..
Characters are mysterious and awesome ♥️♥️♥️
Thanks to the writer for giving us this master'addictive'piece ♥️♥️
The novel that you write is very fun and interesting to me.
I love reading it very much when I'm free.
every story plot in all the chapter is great and good.
I wish I could read it every day to fill my day.
I also hope that the authors continue writing to the end and I always support your hard work. thank you and don’t drop or reboot it because I like read your novel.
I love this book so much already and I just started. Although there aren’t much I have a feeling that this book is going to be better than it already is
This novel is just insane.
Really confusing in the beginning.
The first few chapters may have scared of some potential readers, because it is just really confusing and the mc seams to be simply evil.
But it all gets better, it is awesome to progress in the story and learn more about the mc etc...
The pacing is awesome.
The only thing i think of as a shame, that we cant see the mc progress through the early levels of becoming stronger, he is already stronger than the most and i would have loved to see him grow from 0 to 100.
But I'm definitly going to keep reading the brilliant story
Pros:
Pretty fresh
Original in it's genre
Cool ability and ideas
Few mistakes in writing
Cons:
A lot of things that make sense but don't happen. Basically people do things that no one would actually ever do sometimes or don't make sense to further the plot.
That's kind of it for cons. Also annoying moments where people are like "are you joking" like b~~~ why would he be joking. This made me hate people.