[An Enjoyable Story That Will Awe You]
Solid plot, fluid writing style, sound storyline, great concept, and awesome execution.
A cultivation story where we follow the journey of our protagonist that isn't actually the protagonist, and whose fate lies in an untimely death, killed by the actual protagonist.
The story is immersive, thanks to its descriptive nature and sound grammar. The story is interesting and draws you in. I am liking how this story is turning out. It is a well-deserved read.
What a great start to an enthralling story! I'm always amazed when books I consider 'not my cup of tea' turn out to be exactly that. Well-written and told in the first person, the first three chapters launch you into a vivid and believable world. There are no grammar mistakes that can pull the reader from delving into this delightful story with a dark undercurrent. I look forward to more chapters and can definitely see this novel as being one that I pour much more time into.
I've read it until chapter 39, so far, I don't really like it tbh, there are some situations where the MC could have done it better, some weird things like calling the system DADDY or Keeps saying that his personality is like that because he's zodiac sign is a GEMINI which is kinda ridiculous.
MC is smart but sometimes its kinda frustrating where the MC has a system with so much potential but he's can't really bring it into full play. Even the Readers in the comments have much more creativity and imagination than the MC.
Its only interesting one I found is the setting where the MC as a Demon can be Summoned into another world and make a deal with Mortals, which he can exploit to gain more souls, troll people, or by spreading despair to make the souls with negative emotions becomes of a higher quality.
This novel is not really that bad but its not that good either, at least for me.
The main thing that turns me off is that I kinda find the MC lacking some of the Mentalities of a Demon, I know he's a human at first and have some human qualities but I got turned off when he used a Very rare high quality soul to make a pet just because he's lonely, sure he can use it as a battle companion but in that time he really doesn't need it and can use the very rare soul for a much better purpose but nope, he wants a dog because he's lonely. Maybe I'm just asking too much since I'm picturing an MC fitting of this novel should be the ones like Fang Yuan from R.I., since that would really bring the potential of this novel into full play.
Maybe I'll be proven wrong in the later chaps, so please just reply to me if it got any better in the later chapters.
I hopE that at some point in the future we can get updates again i was really starting to enjoy the story and then the updates just stopped. please Author I need to know the rest of the story.
Great, just don't drop it. OK
Make mc eviler.
Selfish, strong........pragmatic, no moral, no humanity
A person who does things for his own interest without care for the world and the people.
This book seems to have the foundations of a great book but is let down by poor writing. if you want to see what I mean I've left comments in the first chapter.
another thing is the way speech is handled, having the name after every speech is disjointing. try to build the speech into the sentences. the name after style could then be used for greater effect in confusing fight scenes or when lots of aside characters are talking. Also in general work on the way you express ideas. eg aghh its my alarm is both a unnatural thing to say and disjointing. instead he jolted awake, realizing the dragon roars were in fact his alarm clock.
This only an example, there's many ways to do it but this book has a lot of potential if you go back and rewrite it.
The concepts are good (Meaning, I liked it). First of all, I was kind of lost in the first half. The second half made more sense. At times it got a little boring, especially the info dump part of part one. but as I said, the concepts are good and I like cats. ( I have five grown-ass cats in my house.) I wish you good luck ahead.
The worst problem with this story is the MC. Everything that comes out of his mouth is either Chuuni cringe or just plain stupid. It's so bad that I've decided to stop reading. He's so dumb that it makes me ashamed to be a human.
The world Background is lit. The character settings is very unique and interesting. The best thing is the writing quality. It is smooth and perfect making this book too immersive. Great work!!
Its really good.
I really liked your book, I'll give your book a full 5 stars if it keeps improving even further. I hope you continue to write many more chapters:)
-Random Reader
I really loved the world building part and how the characters are introduced. Very engaging in terms of how the plot moves ahead. I am really enjoying this read. Best wishes to the author and keep going on your writing path!