The author doesn't seem to know what kind of story this should be.So, imagine a cultivation world. Is it a cultivation story? No, the main character dies. But they are reborn in a different world. Oh, it's an isekai? No, they return to their first world through a VRMMO. Hey, that's the title of the story! But they also get a system, with an AI, and nobody else has that. But it's not really a system story either.Many threads are brought up, but abandoned before they can do anything interesting. The game prevents the MC from using their prior cultivation techniques. Oh, but there might be workarounds (through the shadow clone, or eaching others). Is the MC going to do something clever to get their old techniques back? Nope, once he gets the system that restriction goes away. Nevermind then.He wants to take his human-form snake followers and take over the criminal underground. Sounds exciting! Just kidding, he dumps them on the side of the road. I guess the snakes are off in the interesting story, while we just follow the terrible MC around.Everything is like this. Oh, there's an annoying girl at school that the MC keeps rejecting but she won't get the message. Just kidding, the MC totally loves her now. Let's get married on the first date.My point is, there are deep problems with the story. The author often retcons their own story (protip: rather than add stuff to the *past*, you can actually go back and edit those chapters when those events were the *present* and put your changes there), So the foundation is constantly shifting. And that's not even touching on the many grammatical and other mistakes. I suspect the author is not very experienced in English. But even if an editor fixed these problems, the story problems would remain.The premise is interesting, but other stories have used this same premise much more effectively. The earlier chapters are OK, but there is a drop in quality later.This story can best serve as a rough outline for what the author really wants, but they have to figure that out. Finish this story, but don't drag it out. Then start rewriting it, after you have a firmer grasp of the overall plot.
I'm reading many trial reads now. and I also looking for the raw novel.but...somehow...ever since everyone is talking about "raw"..........it suddenly gives another meaning...yeah having it raw is the best I bet.( ͡° ͜ʖ ( ͡° ͜ʖ ( ͡° ͜ʖ ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) ͜ʖ ͡°)ʖ ͡°)ʖ ͡°)hahahahahahaha............
please make a restriction that only the person wearing the necklace can have the benefits like the drop of essence of whatever it was called cause it will be boring if he gives it to someone else,it is his cheat!thanks.
please get it select..........................................................................................!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is fire ?, but I wish it had more chapters Question: will the mc find his wifeQuestion 2: is his son the grandmasterQuestion 3: how strong is a golden core cultivator
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I must say I'm impressed after finishing this novel. Although it started of a bit fast, I still understand nd the novel very well. It's all about coaching, and it's interesting to see the POV of the man behind the famous athletes. It also contains host and system interactions which are not too many and for me, that is okay. If you're looking for a novel to pass the time, here's the novel for you.
So far, quite a good story, I read with pleasure.I think it can go up in the top ten. (Or the top three.)I really hope that the translation will be fast, as the number of chapters written is enormous.
This novel is everything ...
If my guess is not wrong then it must the mysterious ancient mummy whom died young. The death was still a mystery though. I like it hope to hear the truth behind his death