how do i write it here but i see the potential this book has making it to anime world. the story line portrayed im this book is no joke. all the little details added and foreshadowinggggggggg. thisss goes nuts, absolute nuts
Overall the story is good. Please continue this masterpiece. Thank you for made this a free to read. I can't wait for the next update. First time the fantasy novel has well character development. XD
I really enjoy your work! I'd love to stay connected and keep up with your latest creations. Do you have any social media or email? It would be great to be in touch~
Been waiting for a novel based only on body cultivationSo far good novel with small spelling mistakes so the novel need some proof readingAnd kind of on the fence about the MC as the guy attracks too much attention when he should be more low profileWell for now still an ok read compared to chinese novels with the same genre
I liikeed your Solo Player Arvinn... So i am willing to give this book a 5-star rating too...exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp
So I went way past the chapters that you've wanted to set as premium, and now I feel like I should give my thoughts on what I've read so far.Storywise, it's fine as a generic video game novel. However there's still stuff that lacks premise and explanation. Firstly, what makes this game so special from the other games, aside from a large playerbase during release, and how does it connect to the MC's real life? I feel like there could be a massive plothole here unless you've planned the future really well, or there might be issues in the future. If the company, per se, designed these devices that are used for the game and it turns out they have something with them that touches on forbidden stuff like time travel or whatnot, you'll have to execute it really well.Now to some minor issues. Firstly, aside from during the phantom tourney where it was apparent our MC was streaming the battles, I had issues knowing when he was streaming and when he stopped streaming. Not only that, there seems to be very lacking in terms of interactions, since all the streamers I've seen frequently interact with the chat minus situations where they're forced to do something that completely preoccupies them. Although the situations you have the MC in prevents him from casually interacting, the only real interactions I've seen was only like 1 chapter in the book, and I suggest having more interactions to make the character seem more like a real streamer (e.g thanking the viewers more for their donations). I also recommend making it more obvious as to when he started streaming and when he stopped.Onto the next issue I feel. The battles, although the descriptions are there, felt lacklaster in the sense of 1, there's not really much interactions. User A uses x skill on the monster, the monster dodges, than activates x skill of its own. This also happens during tourney, as character a casts a skill that summons tentacles, but then we just jump to character b's POV of suddenly becoming entangled. I'm not sure if you can understand my suggestion here, but for example:Character A uses [warcry]. Letting out a loud howl, the members in the parties felt themselves strengthen as they watched their attack stat sharply rise. Something like this paints for more imagery, and although there are areas where you did do this, some areas felt lacking or executed not well enough. This is something you can polish.Final thing I feel that your story really needs is risk. For one, this character is playing this game for some odd reason instead of working on a way to save his family's business, yet we don't know how the game is related to his past at all. If you die in the game, you die irl is one of the most popular risks. In the case of the King's Avatar, we have the MC working towards building a new team and going back to pro league, hence there is a clear goal. With your story, aside from making a guild and whatnot, it seems like his goals are unclear of what he wants to do different in this life. If I had a chance to go back in time, I wouldn't spend it playing a video game that would eventually die unless there's a very good reason to. Be careful of these plotholes.
New chapter are released an it has a PoV seson please check this out and the in story there are huge twist i consider it your likeit you guys thak you
I enjoyed all that I read. The author uses good descriptions and it really pulls you in to the story. It makes it easy to get into it. To get caught up in everything.
Uh, its hentai cultivation. cool right? I want exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp
this is so cool pero sa tingen ko lagyan sana ng onting romance hehe or ako lang nag iisip non but really this is good if only theres romance in it im reading chapter 3 rn hope this novel gets more cooler.
Damn, this sure gave me tense man. I feel sorry for reyhansh that he deal with his bad unlucky life.Anyway i hope rin would be reyansh's bf someday ??.I can't to read more
it is an interesting story... the plot is different from a normal story.... the vocab is great ... thr characters too... keep up the good work!