What a shame...... clearly it's a sketch of the novel profane prince of domination, however it's a little worse, mc poorly done, and the way you try to fragment the scenes is bad, after all it's not an anime, it doesn't flow .
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It's like him and his little sister in... a huge drug trip. Very trippy. I don't even know if this is worth reading.. Lol.
Honestly, only times I see plots like these executed well would be in JPs.
I am so excited for this I love all of MLB's works and this looks like it will be no different and i can not wait till it really starts to heat up and get good i am excpecting this one to be no different.
Best trial read this time for sure, especially when I expect brainless characters and plot. This seems to have some thought put into it at least. Which I appreciate.
Wow, the synopsis is very eye catchy and this is gonna be an awesome book. I haven't gone much far but I enjoyed the chapters so far. This is a total recommendation for someone who is looking for an action thriller book. Good work author
The author does not provide how the system lvl up, he gives the mc unlimited supply without cost, and the MC for some reason a transmigrated person is an idiot. The MC knows that 1 tasteless drumstick cost 10 silvers but sell a magic sweet potato which is a powerful mana potion for 3 silvers.
Authors post. This is my first novel so there might be some errors. If anything sounds familiar then keep on reading as this comes from my head and my own personal experiences. I will say that the first 6 chapters might be boaring and dry as I’m setting up the MC. I come from a screenplay writing background so I might use some of those elements. thank you for reading this and any feedback is welcome. So without futher ado, enjoy this ride.
the writing us definitely off, or maybe it's the translation. it's not really that good and the story doesn't flow well. it's hard to tell who's who and the dialogue isn't the best
This was quite good for the author's first novel. The writer's intentions were clear and he clearly had a steady plot in mind.
However, there is a LOT to complain about. I'm guessing English isn't the author's first language. The story itself wasn't bad but the English was absolutely terrible. Errors from all aspects of english were everwhere, straight throughout. Grammar, punctuation and capitalization needed the most work.
Starting with the title, why is it in common letters? Titles are supposed to be written like how it is on your book cover, words starting with capital letters.
The synopsis was poorly structured and confusing. For some reason, all the writer's sentences started with common letters. Sentences should always start with a capital letter.
The novel started well without these errors for like the first few paragraphs of chapter 1 then it just gradually started getting worse and worse. Sentences started with common letters and names were in common letters. Please note that names should start with capital letters.
There wasn't a proper flow and the story seemed rushed. There were also too many redundancies.
The author is clearly trying to get the reader to admire the mc and sympathize with him but I just find him stupid and annoying. The reader would probably sympathize more if we knew why he was always being beaten up and why he needed to save others. Being beat up because of being weak and "saving" people because his father asked him to isn't very sufficient. I'm not saying you should change his reasoning but try and make it a bit more substantial.
I recommend that the author use granmarly to assist with his writing or get himself an editor.
Overall, this novel has a lot of potential but is seriously plagued by poor grammar and English skills. I find the plot very interesting and would love to continue reading but the errors are just too unbearable.
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An interesting book I'd say... No much info dumps and easy yet good grammar usage.
For now, I do not know if the MC will later evolve into a human, but I guess I've got to be patient with the author.
Just keep a steady update time and try your best... I highly recommend this book to other readers.