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Chronic deletion of reviews, pretentious author, horrendous writing.
This author is a disgrace to this site.
Can this even be considered a novel? It was so terribly written it felt like I was in a kindergarten classroom helping students edit their ‘essays’.
All I can say is, there is no surprise that the author deletes reviews. How else would this novel have anything above a 3.0 without deleting them?
This is definitely going in my roast reading list. Too bad you can’t delete that too, author.
Book is good. Concept is interesting. Just some mishaps with the writing and translation quality. Hopefully later chapters will get better. Expect a harem maybe.
Overall, it's a pretty good take on a system cultivation novel that's very interesting with a likeable main character.
The MC is a genius prince who, after being killed, returns to the past with memories intact, and he gains a cultivation support system to help him change his fate. He's capable of learning from past mistakes and using the information he brought back from the future to achieve his goals as well as his revenge on those who took part in killing him. Also, since he's written as an anti-hero, or you could say cunning/ruthless, he is capable of making decisions without being overly concerned about people and things that have nothing to do with achieving his goals. Also, he's not the type of character to simply return kindness that was given to him. In fact, he seems slightly cynical and distrusting towards others, believing they have their own motives and plans behind their actions. Which is understandable considering his position as a prince and his experiences from his past.
The main things that can be considered an issue would be lack of supporting characters for now, since the MC is currently too weak to let his intentions to be known and his general distrust toward others. It would be great to see him gain some loyal friends or subordinates in the future. However this can also be considered a boon if you don't like stories where the MC simply gains loyal followers by just walking around.
Another negative would be that the world setting isn't explained enough. For example, there were mentions of different levels of spiritual energy within the world, but there is no mention about the difference between them and how it effects the power scaling of the world.
For example, the MC is currently in a place with a lower concentration of spiritual qi, but there is no mention about how strong the cultivators are in this area in comparison to the MC's current strength.
It also doesn't explain the cultivation realms very well. Currently, all we know is that the first major realm is Qi-Refining then Qi-Stabilization. It's also inferred that there are 10 stages within each realm, seeing how the MC broke through to Qi-Stabilization realm from level 9 of Qi-Refining realm. However there isn't any mention of the sequence that comes after Qi-Stabilization.
There is mention of Half-saints and saints but that should be a much higher realm than the current MC. I feel like there should be an explanation even if it ends up turning a chapter into an info dump.
took over an hour of digging around but i found the raw title 亏成首富从游戏开始 this is so hard to find, normaly i just find raw title from reviews or novelupdates but i figured i would be the grownup in all this and help others in my predicament.
Really like story especially love plot and wish you success. Currently, the only problem is mistakes in sentences, such as using the same word twice when it is enough to do it once(like - You do you.).
It's a wonderful book, plus I'm a fan of supernatural book especially with Devils and Demons
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p.s. Author don't punish me.
Another Review from the Author. This time this is not as shameless as the first one since I will address complaints the readers pointed out. I know everyone wouldn't be pleased by this work of mine, however before going in, please read this first.
This novel is written in First Person Perspective and with only one perspective which is the MC's.
So everything you will be reading here were all taken from the MC's own eyes. His thoughts, what he experienced, everything. He's the source.
I also took it upon myself to write while keeping in mind not to self-project myself in the novel. His thinking will all stem from the 16-year old mind who because of a sudden increase in clarity or intelligence or anything you could call it, tends to overthink most of the time. And well, there's also his adaptability so he won't react as you expected on something where one should start asking questions or be surprised instead he will fall into his overthinking habit.
This is where the first complaint will be addressed.
'I am weak.' You will be seeing him thinking like this at the earlier parts of the story. He's an overthinker and whenever something happened that's out of his grasp, he will immediately lean on that thought.
Of course along the way he will outgrew that thought but yeah, some dropped this before that happened. He started from the bottom and I wanted to show what's going on inside his mind so his mindset at the earlier chapters will stay like that.
For the second and third complaints, the Harem and the Side-characters . This is clearly tagged as a harem novel so expect the harem members will be introduced.
'They were introduced but there's no substance in them. What are they thinking? Why did they do that? Why did they fall for him? etc.'
As this is a FPP novel, of course, you wouldn't be privy to what the other characters in the novel are thinking most of the time. That's unless they pointed it out or explained it themselves. Though they're introduced, the times they interact with the MC were all situational and most of the time their real thoughts were still not showing on the surface.
They're all moving and thinking by themselves in the background even without the MC looking at them, so the next time they will show up in his perspective, bits of pieces of what they're thinking and their personality will be exposed.
I used this kind of writing on my first novel as well, slowly unraveling the personalities of the characters introduced. But since some of the characters will be left behind on their worlds and it's still unsure when they will show up again, they will feel flat.
I understand that point but that's just how it is. Characters will not immediately open up to him but as their interaction with each other increased, you'll see the sides of them that's not shown during the first time they were introduced.
'Not detailed enough. The description is too bland.'
As this is something even I am not confident at. You will feel that his environment were not described properly. I suck at describing things and people but I'm trying to improve it through continuous writing and reading.
I think this is everything. For the typo and grammatical errors, I can only ask you readers to point it out for me to fix. I only use Grammarly and Docs to correct the mistakes and surely they're not perfect.
If I still missed a point that you feel like its a blunder of the novel, feel free to comment it below and I will answer them to the best of my understanding of my own work.
Thanks for reading. :)
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THE CHARACTERS
Since it's only the beginning, I'm having a hard time figuring out the characters, I'd need more details, but for that I'll have to keep following the chapter publications. From what I've read, I think there will be a lot of characters with whom we could recognize ourselves in them, giving the book a very personal touch, which is an amazing thing.
THE UNIVERS
The concept of reversing the cycle of life is an idea that one might find weird, but I think it's great, in the sense that the reader, or personally, it took me out of my comfort zone and I really enjoyed it. It's something rare, I've never read a book that used this process, and I don't know where you got the idea, but I would call it genius and it fascinated me throughout the chapters. When we read a book, no matter what genre, we are looking to escape, to travel intellectually and to use our imagination, this book fulfills all three of those goals. We can see where you are going with your story, each chapter makes sense and completes each other.
THE WRITING STYLE
The vocabulary used can sometimes be difficult to understand, if, as in my case, English is not our native language. However, the story is precise enough to guess the meaning of complex words. Everything is in the right places. By that I mean there is neither too much nor too little. The length of the chapters combined with the vocabulary makes the whole thing fluid and homogeneous. It is a pleasure to read your story.
This story falls in the same pit of those other authors using the "old man" age without actually have the mc act smarter than your average 12-18 year old mc in other stories.
could not read pass 5 since it weird me out when I see the mc acting like that (and no, mc is not acting to hide anything since it's him speaking to himself, already giving me an idea of what his actual mental age actually is)
If you skip and ignore tha "old man" then it's ok. I think it's the same level of writing/plot you are probably accustom to in this site.