Ty for giving my novel a try. I will try to keep this short.
After reading many novels, I have decided to write my own, so some things may feel nostalgic. However, despite my inexperience and the similarities this novel may have with others, I will try to keep things fresh and original.
The protagonist is at the apex when it comes to Alchemy, also known as Pill Concocting. But even with his experience, he is not perfect and failed to create his perfect pill, which has cost him his life.
The next time he awakes, he finds himself in the body of a silkpants in some backwater place in the Lower Realm.
And this is where the story begins.
The mc is evil I don’t know anymore cause author makes it so confusing that the mc is sometimes acts like wimp and sometimes smart, it annoying to read.
Shame it has lot of potential especially the background story.
This is very good! I’m looking forward to more!
this has to be the worst translation I've ever seen the story would be much better if it actually made sense
Honestly couldn’t get more than a few chapters in due to no proof reading to find all the easily spotted fat finger typing? Random characters in words random letters in others. That’s without the normal mistaken words because English, and the main characters name bouncing back and forth between Jake and Leon
The pace of the novel is very slow in comparison with other similar novels in the same genre. Same goes for the mc to become stronger if not for the fact that he can fight more than his power allows , Also from the way author is going with novel it looks like it will take months to reach certain arc where mc meets his origin family and with some female character introduced which are possibly future harem members are way above his current power and knowledge which tells it will be a long novel not that i mind because it will be good but if the pace was a bit more than it could have been more enjoyable . like literally it takes so much chapter for mc to just turn from 11 to 12. as far as i have read i.e till chapter 400 it is overall good with some problems which can be rectified in future.
Nice story. Even though only 9 chapter it is a good read.
It's a transmigration novel but as I have read most of the transmigration novels, usually the plot line never changes where a normal person get into a new body of royal or rich person but here in this novel, this is the twist becoz ML here being a king in previous life get transmigrate to be a novice.(poor guy)
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It's a great story and the world building is amazing.
My problem is:
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There is so much things happening at the same time. Seems Like the mc will never get good rest... he is always in danger.. It feels a bit stressful even for the reader.
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Suddendly the mc is jumped from the 1st to 9th stage and the only struggle is THe breakthrough in major realms.. and that's ok but you ShoUld'Ve focused more at the progress between minor stages.
Review made at chapter 240
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