It was interesting at first and I trie duo stick with it as long as I did. Novels definitely got some good ideas and I felt like there’s been some lost potential somewhere here. Main thing I disliked about this novel is the hypocritical and unlikable main character. I personally can’t continue on with a novel where I find the main character this irksome. It’s not unreadable like the God and Devil World pile of dung (sorry dung, at least you’re useful as fertilizer)
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Review: Chapter 58
This story is excellent. Though it may have similarities to "My Vampire System", they are essentially different stories. The beginning has many similarities with "My Vampire System", like how a weak trashy mc got a system to start his road to face-slap all those higher levels than him and how high levels look down on low levels like our mc. Though both stories are still different from each other. For starters, the mc in both stories has different personalities and perspectives. This may not seem important for now but it will gradually dictate how the story will proceed from thereon. This is also why I love reading stories with similar concepts since it will save time searching for other stories. Now for the breakdown as to why I rated this as 4 stars.
Writing Quality 5/5- There are small grammatical errors, phrasings, and some sentences but the writing is good enough that you won't notice such details while immersing yourself in the story. There are no major mistakes in the writing. Though there's still room for improvement but I will give it 5 stars due to the writing being understandable and comprehensible enough. Unlike, some other stories on this website.
Stability of Updates(5/5)- The author stopped updating for a while but gradually returned to updating the book with around 1-2 chaps a day. Pretty stable if you ask me.
Story Development(4/5) - The story takes place on Earth after monsters invaded and humans lose at first but gradually fought back after having some supernatural powers. Then we have the MC who is trash at first but gains a system to help him on his path to glory. Pretty cliche, but the story is still at the beginning stages and not much is revealed for now. Though the MC is showing signs of being a Gary Stu and most likely a golden thigh that his friends will hug. Thus, the 4 will change it though after 100 or so chaps.
Character Design(3/5)- At this stage of the story side characters and small-time villains are pretty much one-dimensional. They hate the mc just cause he's a low level. Pretty much everyone hates him aside from a few 'friends' who happen to be children of some bigshots cause why not? Also his 'friends' the so-called main cast of the story aside from our mc are the only ones with their own character development. Side characters and mobs just hate him to the bone cause they can without not much reason than him being low level. The reason I gave character design 3-stars is solely because of Kye, the mc, his character as a naive, innocent, yet cruel when necessary little brother is what makes this story different from all other stories with cruel, calculating, or even cold overused MCs. Though his character development is still in question as it is still early will change it later though when there is development.
World Background(3/5)- As of this part in the story, not much is revealed about the world background. Heck, there's still no info whatsoever about the inside or even surroundings of the city/base where MC is staying aside from the military base(or school?) he's currently studying and living. Even then aside from where he sleeps or where he goes for his studies, there's still lacking info on the background.
This is a pretty good military-isekai. I enjoy reading it and am genuinely curious as to how the story will progress.
Hey everyone , ur friendly author here :)
The mc personality will be kinda standard :/
Nice and kind to friends and family , no marcy and dark to enemies , now this will not be an heram , and im not quite good with writing style but i will improve as time goes on :)
Now from tommarow and so on i will relese 1/day chapters
For the moment (Chapter 4) I find the beginning of the story very good, I can't wait to read the rest. So good luck and continue your good work author-san (Sorry for the mistakes, review written in French translated with goolge translation)
CRITICAL REVIEW Read up to current latest release 71/71
It's not bad. Very lightnovelish and anime-like written story. I don't really have much to comment about it surprisingly. There's some persona inspiration which is awesome. As for the romance, I can't tell if the mc is being oblivious or is dense. I assume the former. A complaint would be that while I did like it, the heroines seem easy to fall in love with the mc. Ngl it really seems to be resembling a tras*y isekai webnovel. Then again it can technically be excused since it is a dating sim world... but I value realism so it bugs me. As the story progesses the mc also appears to be falling into the shoes of becoming a true generic mc. Please try and avoid that. This is a frequent occurring issue in most 'mob stories', which defeats the purpose of the mob genre. It's hard, so just try and make it so he doesn't seem generic.
Another issue I've had is that the novel does seem to kinda rush things somewhat. It kinda gives off the impression of skipping/wandering around with no truly meaningful substantial progress.
An example would be when the story introduces Elicia. (Spoiler) Okay so then have an event together and then everything is just glossed over. They are friends I guess? We barely see any interactions which is different from someone like Luna who we see a lot of and see clear development of and most importantly... REASON TO CARE- that's how I express it. It's much like Isabel and Elizabeth where everything feels glossed and not substantial. They don't give me reason to care enough. And its not enough to tell, but you must show it. Luna feels "show" while others feel like "tell".
Some spoilers~
Grigory is awesome but his prestige falls the further you are in the novel. Perhaps its because of my expectations for him of being like a double-edged sword. The seemingly ominpotent power he brings in exchange for something precious later along the line. Because right now, he's basically a full-on slave for the mc. I had hopes of him being a very nightmare-like being for the mc that hes forced to use. But with the tone of the story and all, Grigory is just likable and comical.
Much like my other reviews, I always end by trying to ship.
As not all heroines are introduced (I think), I suppose I ship the MC with Elicia since I'm a fan of tragic heroines. Even tho we barely know her.
I hope this doesn't end in a harem ending!
I really like the premise of the story, but the characters are just really bad. ALL the girls are just potential members of mcs half-hearted harem. The guys are a lot more interesting, except the mc. Daniel (the mc) is really indecisive and has no actual goal except a vague promise he gave to michaela of "building a sanctuary for the oppressed" which isn't the focus of the story at all. The story essentially just revolves around Daniel getting harassed by the hightower, Daniel fights the high tower off with absolutely no problem but doesn't really retaliate for whatever reasons (indecisive) and emboldened by Daniels inaction the hightower comes back for more. Rinse and repeat. Daniel is also pretty stupid. The author tries to make him look like he's smart, but he really just isn't. A lot of his decisions are just... weak. I guess he has to act this way because the author made the mc just too strong, so the only way to create some tension is to have Daniel just not use his power against the hightower. (the big bad organisation) And what is his explanation for not unleashing his overwhelming might against this objectively evil genocidal organisation? Because he SIMPS for an incompetent woman who is against violence. EVEN THOUGH this organisation has tried and succeeded in causing significant harm to his loved ones MULTIPLE TIMES and he STILL doesn't fight back. Btw, he also has no problems flirting with a woman who openly supports slavery. Its infuriating, really.
It's been a while since I read such a poorly written book.
The editing is horrible. The same chapters are repeated again and again.
The MC is unbelievable. It's not OP just not even remotely possible for a person to behave this way.
The portrayal of the world lacks any depth whatsoever. Everything is too shallow and without thought.
Very disappointed
Is this a huge harem?
Is this a huge harem?
Is this a huge harem?
Is this a huge harem?
Is this a huge harem?
Is this a huge harem?
Is this a huge harem?
Is this a huge harem?
A guy and his wife are sitting and watching a boxing match on television. The husband sighs and complains, "This is disappointing. It only lasted for 30 seconds!"
"Good," replied his wife. "Now you know how I always feel."
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i don't even understand why we novel but this here
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