Hi, author-nim! You hooked me on your first chap, its great. Love the writing style too, descriptive yet could grasp the readers imagination. :))
I haven't read it, however, to see something similar to my fiction is truly fascinating! I shall see your path in what road you roam! That I, the Deaf Genius God, Ycnágnnisssz shall see your journey!
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Really lovely story now finds himself almost at the point of losing but by some strange luck he starts a new path that leads him on the path to greatness.
'The fruit of lowering OQ is ripe' bruh. Looks like this mfer found MTL novels.
I like the story.I don’t like the system because it decided what the protagonist should aim for and is forcing him to follow that path.The protagonist isn’t that good at planning despite seemingly having been a genius.
A very interesting story so far! I really enjoy the dynamic between the male and female lead. Joshua is a "mad scientist"-type guy who loves tinkering and coming up with all sorts of ideas just for the sake of it; while Catherine is a more down-to-earth, but ambitious person. It's often hard to tell who is the realist or the idealist in this partnership, which only makes it more interesting. It also never feels like one is clearly superior and could work on their own, as they complement each other.Speaking of Joshua, it's rare to find a good web novel where the MC plays a supporting role. Even rarer is an actually interesting plot with some intrigue and nuance rather than a brawl-fest where power trumps all. Catherine is already making progress towards her goals by building allies and thinking about the big picture (while simultaneously trying to deal with a complicated scheme against her), so I hope this carries on.One complaint I have is that Joshua feels like too much of a caricature right now. Sure, he got to say his goodbyes, and I can understand that his eccentricity is also a coping mechanism. Still, the guy died not too long ago and now finds himself in a completely unfamiliar world, forced to fulfill a role he never agreed to. I just can't see him coming to terms with the situation that easily. Plus, he should have unexplored sides to him and room to grow as a person, so I hope to see some development later on to make him more human and interesting.Now comes the elephant in the room: the writing. It's passable for the most part, but the punctuation and paragraph structure need some work. Commas are sometimes abused (or not used when they should be) to make sentences way too long. Combined with the occasional gigantic paragraph, this can make the reading experience very frustrating. They're not too difficult to fix, though: make more liberal use of periods, colons, and semicolons to break things up; and try keeping paragraphs to at most 5-6 lines.All in all, this has some serious potential, so I'm looking forward to the next chapters.
Yo guys. I will be stopping the updates for awhile since I feel there is alot that is missing in the story and the beginning was very short which makes most of people to skip it and later confused. I will be posting a new novel and hope that work well. But if there is anyone who liked this story and want me to continue I will gladly do so. Please do wish be luck for my other novel. It will be based on vrmmo and I will be doing some research first and try to make it with best of my efforts. Thank you for all your support
Well, the sypnosis this time isnt that bad, it tells you what the goal and the begin is.So basically a little lolita came before the mc telling him he is the descendant of a devil/demon lord of the underworld. The devil lord was betrayed and killed leaving only two inheritences left for the mc.The little lolita (If you count it as one)Weird device (Mechanics from a game mixed with the reincarnation law)Because the little lolita is weak she really can't do anything combat related, but she was a genius that helped the devil lord with making the weird device.Due mc's opinions they decided to make the weird device into a virtual reality game. (Basically SAO without the life risking sh*t)Thus players join the game obvlious that they are in the underworld. They slay mobs for something called *soul coins* that could be used to buy weapons that were made with soul coins by the lolita.5 soul coins production cost = 1 weaponShop: weapon = 10 soul coins.With that the mc gathers a lot of soul coins to built a lot of things in the underworld. (They also use the players to explore sort of?)Translation Quality: Nothing to complain about.-Stability of Updates: Well...... Probably it's okay but for now.. GUYS VOTE FOR IT!-Story development: It's interesting, the new things they keep adding kept it interesting. Such as a war, mansion and other things, plus the interaction of players is also fun to read.-Character design: They are well made, let's hold it on that.-World Background: Isn't much. Because the author focusses on the underworld and real world, while also the video game, the world background isn't really to see because how much the author wants to hide it.But, I still give 5 stars because the author did a pretty good job on the other things. I mean, you need to focus on the game, real life world and underworld.I'm not mad at that.
As an author myself I just wanna say this book is amazing, it keeps you hooked from beginning to end with the uniqueness of a guy who simply loves fire! Not to mention the way his character grows more mature and betters himself as he experiences life. The ending was kind of rushed I saw WAYY more potential for what could’ve been. But when you’v been writing a book this long its only natural the ending gets slightly rushed.And I love how the marked that the story would continue on with his children and Milkyona had even reincarnated to look over the new crimson dragon. ?Keep it up man!
All 4 Novels this week are bad, but this one is the worse.As always you have an immature MC who is despised every chapter. If the world were really to work like that, there wouldn't be any blacksmith/shopkeeper/youngsters in this novel's world.And why do we have 4 books of 40 chapters while before we had 5 of 60?
so I have red up till chapter 49 so I will base my review based on that.Mc is a transmigrated player into an NPC body with the ability to upgrade his abilites through something called Life points , which he gets when he kills Npc and players alike , this novel got possible kingdom building or more like sect building.The world background for now isn't large but it's sufficient for the place the novel is at now.Mc isn't dumb and he gathers his forces using the system and his own power to crush them to submit to him.all in all I would suggest you read it.