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I don't like reading long chapters but I was suprise I didn't get bored reading yours. Good character design and the world background got me hooked. Let's go transform into bats.
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"One doesn't actually needed a lantern to venture the unknown of a murky lake. They need an explosive and a diving suit." - MF, the paranoid strategist chuckled.Writing: grandiose, you could find the best quality of use idioms and metaphors here, not mentioning that the mc is a poet herself.Character: MF is a devious schemer and a master of improvisation. If a person took one step, the mc already did 100 steps while also predicting the exact spot of not only one person, but other 100 people exact length and wide of the step they took. Every of her action have reasons but physically and psychologically. Not because she is a genius, but because she is the culmination of hard workStory progression: It's gratifyingly satisfying, you will be grinning while fondling your finger as those mortals got played within the mc's plan.A very satisfying book about the unbecoming devil.
definitely a gem of a novel, im so glad that this was in my recommendations!!!! reading that back that sounds kinda sarcastic, but i honestly really love this book so far, more than most ive read. definitely deserves top 20 maybe even top 10 once more chapters start stacking up. i hope you stick with this one author, you could really make a career out of this with how talented you are :)
This is definitely R18 and it does it well. The mc is actually evil and not a beta at all. It's a fresh read and I LOVE IT! The only issue I have is the grammar at times is funky and sometimes words are spelled right, but as a reader I still understand the general gist of it.
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Finished chapter 1, can't read more.Needs to be edited properly. It makes sense but it's either the wording or broken sentances that needs to be fixed. Example in chapter 1, " it took much time for humanity...." fix it to " it took a long time for humanity....". Remember to use commas, and don't keep switching between past tense and present tense, it makes reading a nightmare. A tip would be to write a plan or direction of where you want this story to go and then write a timeline of events and/Or conclusions. Don't write they gained control of distant dwarf planets then write how they started the space exploration era, switch the two sentences around and it will make sense. The rest of this is just fillers.Vuvuvucyxychuvuvucucuvuvivcycycucivobohogudydhcivibovivucuctxrxtcuvivibobigucycuvuvivivicuctxtcucuvigivivivivuvucuctxtxtxtxrxtxrxrxezextcyvibobobivucyxtxtxycuvivivivivuvucuctxrxrxycuvuvivivvuvuvuvuvuv
This novel has one of the best world building ever.Not only do characters appear real and lifelike , but they are also moderately intelligent.For e.g how should the talentless son of clan leader be treated ? Most novels would bully him to death but guess here he(The predessor of MC is is the bully.Their rival clans have reasons to suppress them and it's not the mindless kill the mc on sight syndrome.Moreover despite MC being arrogant he doesn't antagonize everybody rather he makes both allies and enemies.It's also foreshadowed for him to cooperate with the black market..Which is the kind of unscrupluos behavior i absolutely love.
This story has the interesting concept of having the MC get reincarnated into another less advanced but still modern world with a system in tow. That's something I haven't read before and when you add in the fact that the systems goal is to force him to take over the world (Much like world domination system) despite the fact that there's most likely many armies armed with modern weaponry.So it will be interesting to see how he'll manage to claw his way up to be able to match the larger more powerful nations. The updates come at a decent rate and the character development so far seems to be good. The writing quality is also good. All in all its a good novel that's been added to my library.
I don't understand all the bad reviews, most of u didn't even read the story before commenting. The author himself said he is still a noob and will make some mistakes, so cut him some slack people, the author has some good idea, don't let it go to waste.
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