This is a diamond in the ruff. Fuck why do they have to do this to us 140 characters
You have such a good premise to work on. Your idea is brilliant but your story writing lacks alot of things. Also, please dont follow the pattern of chinese authors to stack in more words and make more chapters. A shorter story would be better if it is relevant. Also, the the modern world isn't as savage as the ancient one he came from. That is all well and good if it was in an ancient chinese world, but if you are writing about the modern world, make it so that the people act like modern people do. Now we do have a lot of assholes around but there are good people around too. Killing someone isn't that common and it isn't condoned either. Also, please don't mind my criticism. This is my first time telling an author my point of view and even that is because I am absolutely in love with idea you have put forth and I wish to read something extremely good rather than something mediocre.
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Grammar lets this book down. But i like the story itself, and would be really interested in reading more.. if only there was more. I like the chatacters only some seem to only appear as fillers but who knows what the future of this book will bring.
I love this I hope you can update again sooner
Not Bad....................................................................................................................................................
It's a good read...you can try mtl version and I still follow it for about 400 chapter ....................................................................................
I loved this! Reminded me of IRAS but has its differences. Please support it so they translate more! Can be stupid but good anyway so read it
No me gustó nada los primeros capítulos del MC hablando consigo mismo y en primera persona fueron un dolor de trasero y después el MC sobresaltandose por toques en el aula lo hicieron ver tonto ahí lo deje, tu MC es una mierda
The story has a great cast of characters, and the plot continues to build with each new episode. Hats off to the author .You're doing an amazing job, Malcolm.
A nice read, It's really smooth and has a intriguing story This work is currently in a competition so please support the author by voting for it.