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Honestly, although better than most of the garbage junk on this site it’s just a TBATE clone. It has the potential to actually be more and interesting but the author forces so many plots just to keep the same storyline as in TBATE. I mean here we have a reborn 18 year old that has never known familial love but runs off first thing to go train with dragons for years leaving his parents to think him dead. He comes back only to leave them after what 2 weeks to become an adventurer at like 7. Yeah okay makes sense for parents to finally get their son back and allow him a 7 year old to go off on adventures. Another thing is the “bind” honestly a terrible name that’s just awkward when magic could’ve worked because as said he came from Eath where magic and mana or essence or elemental anything could’ve worked but no we have bind and binders. Just doesn’t work other than wanting to be different from the otherwise same story TBATE. Early on we get informed that the average age of someone awakening is around 12 and our main character awoke at 3 you’d think this would give him an advantage but no not really everyone and their mother seems to be a 8 year old fully awakened genius that is close to being on par with our 18 year old combat veteran. Another thing I have to point out is the switching between pov’s because it doesn’t add anything to the story other than tooting the MC’s horn and saying how different he is from the other boys and how great he is. There is little to no development for the side characters other than being there to support the mc. But like I said it’s better than most novels on the site and the only reason I’m being harsh is because the author has potential it just makes me mad to see a possibly good novel turn bad because it’s trying to follow another story.
I am getting cinematic vibes here! There is so much detail on the characters and places and that's why I love it! I hardly give one story a 5 out of 5 ratings and this one really deserves it! I'm not fond of the genre but I'm starting to like it because of this work. Hands down, author... you have made a masterpiece here.
This is a book for mature mind, the author is simply amazingly good. I love his style of writing and he has set the right pace with the synopsis.
I love every bits of what I'm reading and this is really a commendably recommendable masterpiece.
Keep the good work up... See u on top.
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This is my first time reading a story that starts with someone graduating from Harvard. I'm already impressed with Alastair for successfully making it through such a competitive place.
But to him my amazement wouldn't even be worth noting cause he has got more important things to focus on and even a few skeletons in his closet.
The story has just begun and there's already a lot of stuff that catches the readers interest.
Also as someone who kind of isn't very good at dressing up for university related events, I can relate to his lack of care on this matter.
Hahhahaa that synopsis seems fun! I'm adding it to my library and letting it accumulate more chapters before binge reading hehe. Keep it up author. I like your Arifureta Fanfic so I expect to like this as well. Welp cya and good luck~
Very strong start!
Writing quality - epic.
Story Development - I only saw two chaps and they were mostly setup chaps, so I can't say much!
World Background - Patiently awaiting the Grand Appearance of Truck-kun! Actually, wait. She's prob just gonna whoosh through a portal with the two boys and maybe her sister.
Character Design - I have a few problems here and they also tie into the storytelling aspect. But these are mostly just personal preferences so please don't take me too srsly.
The way you write the details of the story are lit. The smells, the sounds, the sights, and the feelings. Most stories tend to only focus on feelings and sight, so I'm super impressed.
But I found myself wanting to skim past these descriptions, because from the first six paragraphs of the story, you told me that the MC is just an averagely interesting person. So when I see her describing stuff, especially everyday stuff like how her apartment looks like and what she does daily, I just automatically think they're going to be something mundane.
And I read the paragraphs fully and sure enough, they're mundane stuff. She talks about how her home looks, a rather small apartment complex for students; she mentions her parents and gets back to diligently praising her sister; then she talks about going to shop once a month...
And at this point, you start to lose me. But after that, she starts to chat with her sister, which let's get honest here, is the best part about the story so far, so I get interested again.
But, when they separate at school and MC starts to think about the average things, you start to lose me again with her average girl perspective.
But then you redeem it by adding that epic description of the manga volumes shaped like a sword. It was a bit hard to visualize, but it was veeery, very interesting. For me, unique stuff like these are much more interesting to read, compared to a beautiful description of a scenery or whatever.
Okay, I think you get my point. But how do you fix this?
Me, personally, I'd add a twist to her average persona. Here's an example.
"I'm just an average schoolgirl with average looks and average charisma, but my hobby is to trap and kill rats."
And then I'd describe her doing average stuff, but doing her best to avoid the rat traps she placed all around her house, and her sister going like, "Momoko! Stop putting rat traps all over the place!"
When they're walking towards their school, I'd maybe describe her glancing around the surroundings, wondering where she would find a rat to trap and kill.
At this point, the reader will prob go wtf. But they'll still diligently read these descriptions of her everyday life, trying to understand what's going on.
She said she's an average girl, but what kind of average girl goes around killing rats? Is she psycho? Or is it normal to have a hobby of killing rats in this world, considering how her sister seemed to take it so casually?
Obviously, this is a super hyperbolic example. And you actually have this kind of twist where the MC loves manga and novels. But let's be honest. Everyone on this website loves manga and light novels. Her loving these things is not a unique trait for your intended readers.
Okay, I went on too big of a tangent here. Basically, I just want you to make your MC more notable, I guess.
But of course, please don't take me too seriously, as this is all my personal opinions.
Loved the story's background and setting as well as the characters I read. The author has a vivid imagination and has created a world for us to enjoy! Great Job!