The noise and kept on resounding, Ezra's vision was distorted and seemingly impaired.
invisible dragon:I said what are you!!
invisible dragon got bored
that was because invisivisible dragon wasn't overlord's teacher so he couldn't
There are two things that will make a person such as this Kaiser to instantly like a story. 1: Fancy cover, 2: comedy genre.Why wait for the japanese to release new romcoms when you have 100+ comedy CN waiting for you. Yes you. Just click the like button!
I like it but don't like the system it's also going too fast it didn't show his family's reaction upon his transformation but otherwise it has potential
I understand why some like it. It's okay if you want to kill time. The author writes from the protagonist's perspective, each chapter has a different story and you can follow easily. The author doesn't seem to be planning a romance which I like. And that in itself makes me want to keep on reading.
So far love tue story. Not many chrafting stories out there with a not so op mc but yet strong enough. Would like to meet more people on his journey even if these arent long term characters to add more flavor. Minor grammar mistakes but very readable. World back ground is still developing in a slow but steady way. Dont care for all the aide story but it does help with world building im sure hope for more keep it up
Hey man I'm popping out over 10 chapters a day so far I think I'm doing pretty good for my first time writing a novel look at me now mom lol
Nice writing quality Good update Good story development Good character design Nice world background !..........................................................................................!
There are quite a few... negatives, should we say, to this story. I'm not saying it's intrinsically bad but by stating you think the quality is there, you've opened up a can of worms. I think you've got a solid base but you need an editor and some quality time thinking over your work. I've only read the first chapter and I'm bothered by it's foundation. Most of your world background is going to come from the places your character travels to and as well, we don't have any background at first at all, even in the first chapter, on the world that the MC leaves behind. Your character design is too bland for my tastes. A character called Alex, the hero of heroes with a system, it seems too Mary Sue. At least you've made him younger, that gives him room to grow. I like that idea.The overall quality is a little subpar. I mean, it's 100 times better than most xinxia novels on this platform simply because the content is actually digestable but it could use some work. I'd suggest running over it and ironing out the kinks, for instance the constant use of the characters name. You can call him 'Alex' or use his last name, use the word boy, youth, teenager, or just not need to include his name at all.Your updates are regular, that's fantastic, I'll give you that.Overall, it's a solid novel but you have a rocky foundation. Whilst I haven't read past the first chapter, I can see the allure of the novel.
This story is pretty interesting and nice, good plot, nice character (But kinda sucks, not to know how the character looks like) and the idea of an NPC as a maincharacter is also very nice. (Sorry, if my grammar is incorrect, but english isn't my language)