I have really high hopes for this as a SCP fan! The premise seemed interesting and the SCP name drop makes me anxiously waiting to see how this goes. I really hope this gets picked up.
great read need more chapters................................................................................................................
There's a problem with the writing. The english itself is fine, but the pacing, focus, and rational are all sub-par.Pacing - There are 3 chapters before the official chapter 1 that are glossaries of terms and information about the world, and this is a definite red flag. 1) This is a terrible way to start a story. I don't want to do homework in order to read a novel for leisure. 2) If this is neccessary to understand the story, then you have failed as a writer. You need to show the audience, not tell them. That's the difference between a story and a textbook. 3) Revealing all these details is a part of storytelling. Dumping them all in the beginning simply means you can't use their revelation to further your story. Discovering things with the MC is one of the joys of reading a book, and now you've robbed us of that experience to some extent. 4) By talking about the X levels of your world and how people struggle to climb them, you not only told us the end point of your story, but informed us that we're going to have to read what is basically the same story X times. Another mystery dead and a promise of an endlessly repetitive story.Focus - You need to trim the fat. Details, such as the fact that the MC came in his pants after his first feeding, either need to be cut out or utilized to further the narrative. I believe you were attempting to show how overwhelming of an experience his first feeding was, but you didn't go into enough detail for this fact to be anything other than a distraction. You basically skimmed through the fact that he was exhausted, breezed through his emotional state, and then described in detail the tent in his pants and the stain from his ejaculation. 1 graphic detail amongst a few brief ones sticks out like a sore thumb, and just because it's about a sexual organ doesn't make your novel more "*****."Rational - "Because the information might put you in danger" is not a constructive reason to deny a amnesiac character information about THEMSELVES. That's basically saying "because the author doesn't want the audience to know." You talk about enemies and danger as if covering your eyes will somehow make them go away. All it does is render the MC helpless to avoid these dangers and force him to stumble face first into them due to ignorance.
So good start little dark made me want to read more so i can find the redemption/evolution of the MC thinking to myself the author has it all planned out....such foolish thoughts.The MC not only does not get any good justice but he is a cuck so beware of neotare elements.The story goes from dark to wanna be comedy its painfull but what is more painfull is that the author has not single thing planned out and keeps adding **** as the story goes on.So to recap story slow and dragged,MC has no memories from his life but is also a reincarneted person from earth(our earth not this world)who also has no memories from earth as well...has some power sealed thats not usefull and somehow gets another power that makes his seal not matter at all(i hope it makes sense cause trust me in the story it doesnt).And the world(oh man)is unknown just some info drops about its history about the races and the story takes place in a prison cave thats like big(convinient to the author who doesnt know how big even himself)where vampires somehow are slaves and have seals that prevent the use of THE WAY( i **** you not that was the term he uses lmfao)and somehow there are guards but it doesnt even feel like a prison.So i hope i saved you guys some time well spent.
Was one of the better Warhammer story’s till it was ruined in chapter 27. Mc ends up in cyberpunk and happens to have become a daemon. Don’t know how it was after that as I dropped the fic at that point.
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Dunno if I had made a review yet or not but nevertheless I will say that this story is fantastic. Don't get out off at the beginning the action filled scenes is amazing and really fun to read. ?????? Good Job Author
AUTHOR DO U EVER LOOK AT THE COMMENTS UNDER THE CHAPTERS?? I HAVE PUT IN Suggestions before but it didn't seem u looked into them or even gave them a thought!!!
In my opinion, this novel isn’t #1 rank material, but the author is a genius for bribing ppl with extra chapters for power stones. Writing quality is not the worse but still pretty bad, lots of misspelling and wrong words used. Once example, ‘integration’ is frequently used instead of ‘interrogation’. Although this happens quite a lot, the real problem is the way the story is written. The writing style is too shallow, it doesn’t give you the sense that you are immersed in the story world. There are not enough details to describe the character and environment. Up to now I still can’t picture what the characters and the school look like. One reviewer compared this with Lord of the Mysteries, which is just absurd. The writing style of LoM makes you feel like you are inside the MC’s head, immersed in his thoughts, emotions, and actions. This novel feels like you’re reading a summary of the MC’s daily activities, it is detached and doesn’t bring you up close and personal.Story development is progressing nicely so far. Contains your typical tropes and plot armor, but it’s not as absurdly done as other webnovels. Not much else to say since the novel is just beginning.Character design: It’s too early to tell but so far just 2 characters have hints of hidden depth, which could lead somewhere interesting. For now, the characters seem very shallow. The characters need to be fleshed out more, especially regarding their physical descriptions. Vague descriptions like ‘short brown hair and tall figure’ and ‘long blonde hair and perfect proportions’ doesn’t cut it.World background has great potential. Not much is revealed yet, but there are portals to other worlds and different species and factions, which leaves much to be discovered. Overall, I like the novel. There are only 108 chapters released so far, so there is room for improvement. I look forward to seeing how this novel progresses, it definitely has great potential.
Let it not be the regular assumed ending . please let it be unique . R'jay keep it high. Brave Care's
need to finish Charlie wade please