This novel has the potential I must say. I can sense the passion of the author in his creation. Though it was still not in its perfect form yet and has to be improved. But don't fret! You will improve in just a whim, you won't notice it. As I observe, you need to practice the flow of narration. World-building is solid and is its core. As for the character interactions, they were cheeky and wholesome. I can see myself when I am still beginning to write haha
I'm not saying this novel is bad or anything. I just wanted to say why do writers love to make the protagonist have to go through the family drama complex? They weren't even his parents, and what made the most sense was that his real parents and family were still on earth, and he was here acknowledging them as new parents to him?
Is it so difficult to make a protagonist who doesn't have to be reincarnated into someone else? Why not just make the protagonist transmigrate with the created body he wants?
That's why I'm fed up with cultivation novels where the protagonist is reborn as a baby or reincarnated by entering someone else's body! It was clear that he still had his real family and parents on earth, why did he have to admit they were like new parents to him? Maybe if he was an orphan or a lonely person who had no one on earth it would be understandable.
Sorry, if I were in the position of the protagonist, I would tell them the truth, I would tell them that I am not their biological child, because their child has died and I am only occupying his body. They probably won't believe what I say or at worst they'll think I killed their biological son and occupied his body.
I also have another choice, as long as I occupy their child's body, I will distance myself from them, I will cultivate until I become very strong, then I will create a new body for me to occupy, with that I will return their child's corpse to them. .
The point is it doesn't make sense that you have to go through a family drama, because they are complete strangers to you.
this is the best review i can make
ODI’S NUTS.
This was my first dip into writing a full-length story connected by multiple parts, if you like where this one going look forward to sequels from multiple character perspectives.
Please let me know, if i have some mistake I would be gladful and thankful for your reminder. Thank you [img=recommend]
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Very good concept. Cant wait to see the future of this novel. The concept of the main character having spent thousands of in-game years slaughtering the other players would be a good back drop for making him not be phased by killing as well as making him a patient butcher. W W W I hope to see where you take this novel and i hope it succeeds
I have just started reading it and it got me hooked up . The synopsis itself is so nice. Good job author keep on the good work. I recommend this book
This is a very well planned and written novel. I've read your other works and I have to say you are one of my favorite authors. on a side note. Thank you!!! As a Knicks fan I have to say this for giving us a moment to shine, even if it isn't reality.
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For those who are saddened that this novel was not picked, rejoice! For this novel has had over 100 chapters translated by the independent TL’ers of XianXiaEngine.
Arthur's character development is getting better and better. I didn't expect him to present it in this detail, every side character contributed to Arthur's character change.