one of the few quality novels in webnovel
I always hold a grudge, i always get my revenge even if i have to wait for 10 years or longer, i will have my revenge
I love revenge, a sweet revenge
Pls update soon!! Cant wait to read next chapter...
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This novel is one of the most amazing things I have picked up in recent years
I can can boldly say that it will become an example novel for other people to write novels on modern and system category novels
One of the must read
I wish the writer all the best and I hope he will be as energetic as he is now
Interesting concept so far, I've read up till chapter 34 so what is to be said going forward is only relevant up till those chapters.
Recommendations to the author:
1. Get someone to edit your chapters, doesn't have to be a professional editor. In fact, you could also pass it through an application that checks that type of thing automatically. Some misspelled words that are fundamental to the stories development and world background, such as Devine (Divine). As well as some normal misspelling, like: rediculous instead of ridiculous and their when it should be there. Anyways, those are some ****** examples.
2. Fix some verb tenses to match with the correct english grammar to make the story flow better.
3. Would recommend an overhaul on your sentence structures to make them "smoother". Example, instead of "It was summer. The sun was hot and bright. In the Wissian town there was a colosseum. In the colosseum a fight is happenning between the two magicians. The crowd is cheering for their respective supporting fighters" It was summer and the sun was shining strongly upon the colosseum located in the town of Wissian; where two magicians where currently dueling making the crowd go wild, while cheering for their favored fighter. Excuse my grammar mistakes, even though I am criticizing I am not necessarily a good writer.
I think that if you made those corrections your story would be so much better. Nevertheless, it's a very interesting story which I will continue to read since it has got interesting concepts and . So kudos to the author.
Though i have never tried BL before, I loved your writing style.
Plot is interesting.
Specially in first chapter.
Those descriptions are deep.
And with good amount of humour, I can see great success for this novel.
But honestly I don't know if BL genera could go up on webnovel.
There were some capitalization errors and punctuation errors but other than that it was nice to read. The system having an attitude issue is also funny and refreshing to see. Also I think a lot of authors here can relate to the beginning
This is a great story with the author already having an idea for the development of the player for the first few seasons. Excited for more content from this amazing book.
HOLY SH*T..!! Did this really came to webnovel...!!??
☆*:.｡.o(≧▽≦)o.｡.:*☆ I'm lucky...
The story gives off a fresh new take on transmigrating. The thought that weapons, gadgets and equipment were sent instead of the person itself gives the story an unusual and unique take on an otherworldly experience. I am excited to know how all of these weapons will give color to this story, and also where will all of us be taken to in the journey of this story. Will the author just focus on the Pacific Island Tribe? Or will we be exploring the other countries, states, or organizations that the other weapons have gone to..?
Good story but needs some editing. It's hard to read but still doable. I love the story though. Hope to read more of it ☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺
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