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You know, you could upload faster and moar. Other than this, there are no fatal mistakes :). I would rate it 4 stars, but bias is supreme so there are 5 stars.
Read to ch 19. So far the world is explained pretty well. It merely states the location not any description tho. Story arc rn seems to be school. There has already been some action. The best part of the novel so far is the characters they seem realistic and have life to them. (At least the ml and his buddy’s, side do have some to a lesser extent) And last but not less the ml seems to be smart. Don’t think ml will be a evil one base on what I know. This appears to be one of the better ones out of this batch. If Any1 know mtl or raw of this piz reply in the comments :)
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Quite a new interesting story, I like the protagonist behavior his overbearing dominant actions and acts yet soft when it came to his sister.
5/5 ヽ(ΦωΦヽ)Great concept and world building! (=ΦÅΦ=)I can already see how action-packed this novel is! (ΦωΦσ)σWell-written and well-described scenes <(*ΦωΦ*)>Good job, author! ლ(●ↀωↀ●)ლ
I liked the whole Alien, Planet hopping, Battle Royale concept that the Author has implemented. Also I don't know why, maybe because I'm a geek for games and survival genre in general, I found the forst four chapters really interesting. The characters aren't described well as of now since it only 4 chapters, but definitely a good story ?
It's a very interesting read for sure. I would totally recommend this to anyone. The author has done a great job at writing the story and though the prose could use some editing, the overall plot and characters are amazing.
To the person that wrote two 5 star Reviews, please stop.??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
This is a very good book you should be very proud of it. There a couple of errors in it but nothing that will take away from the story. Therr is not a lot of fox store out there so please keep going. I hope it will be just like ”reincarnated as a fox with a system” and just as many chapters but please if you do drop this which I hope you don’t please tell us.
Looks like a kid is writing this up , we can call this a real TRASH. However i am addicted to the story so i will finish reading this. But will never suggest it to anyone.
Not a bad story but profoundly stupid. Writing/translation/editing are good and its easy and enjoyable to read but the author has crammed every cliche in the story. MC is a scrawny nobody hat even flies wouldnt **** on but his 1337 gaming skills make him the terminator in real life. Men LITERALLY faint in fear when they see how awesome he is and women are so wet they need a diaper to go in public. On top of that I doubt the author played a single MMO in his life. MC is a melee fighter with no healing ability yet he constantly soloes high level elites. How? He never gets hit during battles since he put a few points in agility. He is a reincarnator who developed a major guild and knew a lot of great players. Does he develop a great team and do dungeons with them? No, only invites his old friend to join him and then we dont hear from that old friend in the next 80 chapters. Then we have the game economy. Its retarded. Guilds are giving millions irl to recruit players but their ingame worth is only a gold coin or two. Yet when MC sells a bunch of gold coins for real money he can only afford to buy some food before running out of money. MC knows where a bunch of valuable chests and locations are but does he go around collecting amazing stuff? No, he spends his gametime in the city zone leveling his crafting.
Don't get me wrong. The story is enjoyable to read. But its so, so, SO damn stupid at times that couldn't help noticing and had to write a few words about it. Look at "The thief who roamed the world" for how to do this properly. Or Zhan Long is also quite good.