I just got to first 5 chapter but story seems to be forced.
1. First time going with a date with a roommate's sister where roommate asked him to go to date. But, their father gets him kidnapped by Mafia just because he don't like his daughter going on a date with anyone and want to test MC.
2.Asking the boss of said Mafia to adopt him when he just wounded some of the Mafia members and Mafia boss agrees to it.
The quality of the writing is very good, the author describes the scenarios very well. There was always a bit of mystery here and there that made me want to read more to see what would happen next.
The only thing that bothered me a little was the length of the paragraphs, but it depends from person to person, otherwise it was really good to me.
Is very interesting, the story is amazing and I can not stop reading as I want to know what happens next. is very well detailed and lets you imagine and feel like you are in the story. keep up the good work, Author. I'm rooting for you.
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Absolutely riveting. It's a must read for all those people who are into fantastic world building and compelling characters. This novel has all germs to become the top novel on this platform. The writer really knows what's he is doing. There are lots of other points I want to discuss but I am afraid I might spoil this hidden gem for you. So guys give this novel a read? you won't regret it.
It's a solid 5-star for me. I wondered what realistic fiction was, and if this story is that definition, then it's amazing. First off, i liked the beginning interviews. It was cute and unique. It kindof gave me a feel of how the personalities of the characters are, which was cool.The story itself is engaging, and smooth. Let's put it this way.... You always want to find out what happens next.
not really a review but more of a plea for more,so please author make more chapters but I do understand the time to create a good story
concept is great but no connectivity when u are walking in q road the author would suddenly talk abouthow a guy is sitting in his home or that the mc has kids or grand kids and even try to add hot shots and other things here i don't get it ! this is pure bad doesn't have much fluidity it's worse than a newbie author this website always makes my expectations lower than what it was hats off
This novel is getting increasingly interesting, Keep it up Sage Muhammed. I wish you can start uploading more chapters daily
Hello Fellow Daoist!
If you're new, I'm sure you're here in the Review Section to see if the story is actually worth reading, right? Honestly though, the early chapters are really crappy especially Chapters between 1 and 20 or maybe even more.
Why? Well, I created this just for fun so I never really had a plot prepared when I started writing this so I just wrote what ever ideas that pops out in my mind. What I didn't expect is that I would actually get a contract for it because you know~..the story was just out of a hobby, right?
So to those new readers out there, if you could at least get past maybe around chapter 30 or 40? I could at least tell you that the story slowly gets better and better. After all, I'm just a noob writer with almost no experience in writing novels.
And if you read past those chapters that I mentioned above but you think that story is still the same like it didn't even have a change? Then maybe it isn't your cup of tea after all, sorry.
Anyway, best of luck to us! ^_^ Peace! \\/
NOTE: For the last time! It was clearly mentioned that weapons bought from the [System] or weapons created after the purging are the only usable weapons and weapons after WWII is a no no.
NOTE TWO: You would only comment about modern weapons being a plot hole if you just skimmed or didn't even read the early chapters at all.
Important Note: I will delete reviews that just rants about the story flow in the early chapters because it didn't go what they wanted it.
Please leave reviews with constructed criticism that points out mistakes in the story where it needs improvement.
Keep in mind that the story was only written as hobby before it was contracted, so I just wrote whatever comes to my mind.
P.S the Stronghold needed to be built in a place indicated by the [System] on his map, it can't be just built anywhere the MC wanted. God, I'm tired of explaining ****! Just read the fucking whole chapters from 1 to 10, all of it was explained there! So stop being a brat and write your own if the story doesn't go the way you wanted it!
Great story!
Amidst all the comedy and author's concoius choice of putting the MC down outright, you will find out that this story offers a great premise, impeccable worldbuilding without the steep cost of spoonfeeding the exposition to the reader, all the way up to the topping of the genuine characters and their choices within the brackets of the given world.
Great read, can recommend especially as a light lecture to relax!