I have lots of problem with your story your story also has not potential but you are not using it properly I mean you could have done your execution in a better way like fated self does not interfere it just please at it is what I mean is you could have made your story longer by using your imagination and information with some kind of science in mixed like that he should be restricted so you can game control over that because of that you can create your own story in better way like he has to find who is for what reason dear could be many options you can but you did not take anything you just got there, and today easy route out
It seems like an interesting book.But is there yuri? Kissing touching and so between the girls?
Henry BIMBO is an author that captures people's attention via strong emotional connection, that leaves the ready wanting more and more. The author describes a sad beginning but joyous ending for a young man that was lost but now knows what love is, because he was abandoned at a young age by his mother.Everybody deserves a second chance especially a second chance of being part of a family and being loved.
Bro if you keep this up this is going to turn out to be a fantastic book. You are cooking!!! Please tell me there will me more than 3+ in the harem.(plzzzzzz) I am planning to but the privilege soon to continue reading this.
Hi mateI just finished reading your book and was blown away! Your writing is incredible, and I couldn't put it down. As someone who's passionate about great storytelling, I had some ideas pop into my head about how to take your book to the next level and share it with even more readers.Would you be open to hearing my thoughts? I'd love the opportunity to discuss them with you!
Excellent story, great world building and Op character development.
has it been dropped please don't drop this it's really good . . ..
This is a good read, different from many stories I've read already. The piloting chapters were intriguing and vivid with descriptions. Words were chosen in a distinct manner that are very easy to understand, not too terminal and deep. Way to go my fellow Filipino author. You did a great job here! More power to you and God bless you always.
That's such a unique concept you have. The first two paragraphs were sufficient to grab my attention. I'm guessing there is more here beyond the VR gaming. That's the sense I got from the synopsis. Let's hope we have some good real world action as well. Keep up the good work author!
This is a really captivating volume, and with more work it could really stand out. I feel the pacing should be adjusted, some scenes feel rushed, and also adjust the clarity for more flow.
Very good book.Try to write something similar.
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