This story didn't waste anytime as in the first chapter Anthony is kidnapped and this pushes the story forward. I won't give away anymore spoilers. So read it for yourselves. ?
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It’s pretty good, the story moves fast and it’s easy to understand. The only complaint I have is the lack of releases, the releases are very uncommon
It's a good novels , with no errors that stand out. thou since advice for the author, it's wayyy too fast paced and chapters are very short. you could have really spent 2-5 on every development of his story it'll still be faced paced but filled with more detail and depth. there's not much attachment to the mc now as everyone praises him,his parents(after not believing in him in the first few chaps),the fans ,the system ,the coaches ,the world. you've got something with alot of greatness all over it, but it needs more realism ,conversations, depth and length. at this pace he'd become the goat in a few years.
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This is not the type of book I would generally be reading. Nonetheless, this started out really well, and the current amount of chapters is not sufficient to leave a proper review. The grammar requires correction at parts. Good luck!
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there's not much depth in pretty much all of the story. everything happens so quickly with minimal dialog or even the main characters thoughts. one second he is fighting in class and one sentence later without any explanation or expanding on what happened or other people's thoughts the class is just over. I can understand time skipping over his first fifteen years even if I felt that his parents weren't really explained at all or his thoughts on the situation cuz it can be explained later but to the whole time he is in the academy the story just feels rushed. it's like "he arrives at school. he meets a friend. he arrives in class." obviously it's not that ridiculous but that's what it feels like.
The first chapter I read this I would say that this is good and have a potential to rise like cultivation online I see a lot of novel that has a good and bad story soo even Im look like a kid but I have a great eye for a great things soo dont let me down.I will give you 5.0 keep it up but take note dont totally copy the vampire system story or you will be sue by there fans.take this good advise.
I am giving you five stars!!! I really love this!!! The first part made me already fall in love. It is very well written and very interesting, you did a great job illustrating the scenes in the first chapter. It's proved to me that your writing is on the highest level. I salute you! And I never expect that there would be actions here, I thought this would be some mild adventure story about a doctor? OMG! I thought it was because the title and book cover is cute. Sorry about that, LOl! In any way, your skills in writing are very great and this story is the biggest proof. Adding this to my library!
I have not read the entire thing, but I have high hopes for this novel. It gives me much encouragement to write my own novels too. It is very inspirational and there are details that are very interesting.