A lovely novel. Keep it up, dear author. More knowledge to your ink?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
Total score - 4.6 The story premise and the hook are very nice, I have a feeling that it will be a very good story just with what is written so far. There are small problems with the writing such as words not being placed appropriately. But overall it is very good.
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This is a great story with an easy to read and relaxing flow. Great content!
No massive lore dumps, which lead to the novel flowing better and allowing readers to try and understand the world from how characters act.
this story is just daebak. it is my first time reading a world hopping story like this and it is very unique. It is so intriguing and makes it hard to stop. Can't wait to see what will happen next
Looks like this book wasn't picked which is sad because it's the only one from thus batch I read. exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp
MC spoils his grandniece so much and that grandniece is someone who he barley met for like 2 days. Oh yh the novel after it hit the 80 years if sign in mark become trash. It become unbearable to read. Going off by the title the MC should be invincible and unrivaled after 80 years but no he not. He is still being lowkey at the same time he is traveling the world. Oh by the way this novel have over 300 chapters and the mc hit the 80 year mark around chapter 125. Im telling yall this so yall wont have to read this used to be good but become trash novel. Trust me i read all 300 plus chapter.
A shameless review and a proper review to post since the novel has reached 100 chapters. So, I would like to establish some thoughts about what you should expect from these 100 chapters.
- My writing was decent, and at the beginning of the novel, it was kind of unstable since I was still trying to play with my words. And my style at that phase was not actually accepted by the mass, so I changed it slowly. I can't tell if my writing has improved since it is hard to self-edit since I can't notice my mistakes. Should I hire an editor? It would be impossible since I don't have money and don't have much time to send plenty of chapters to an editor.
- The story wasn't established as I wanted to show that the MC was aimless, or rather doesn't have a specific goal to stay except going to the Immortal Heaven where immortals live. It was kind of messy, I agree since all of the encounters the MC had weren't that long. But along with it, after chapters 50 and above, there will be some sign of the plot. And truth be told, the plot was too slow.
- Long side stories to make the world background more introduced. But not to the point that it won't be connected with the MC. All of the side stories were made for the plot and a path for the MC's journey.
- The character design was a bit off, you may say. He is an immortal sage but still acts like a kid? Well, it will be for character development and part of the plot and discussions about the MC. [May contain spoiler] MC had abilities sealed, but some were activated every time. One of the examples is the Absorption Body, which works with mana and Qi, and I am saying that he also has mind abilities. Let's say that there were some side effects that he still didn't notice as he didn't pay much attention to them since it was natural for him at this point. And I'll mention that in these 100 chapters, only once or twice is his personality pointed out, so in the future chapters you will learn more about the MC.
- What to expect in these 100 chapters might have been mentioned but I am getting excited with the world background and the MC's background story. Proper background story to understand the MC more.
- The cultivation part, well, the Heaven where the MC was, is the weakest of them all. So, I am telling you that in the upper heavens, you will see what cultivation is. There were mystical arts, and some strong techniques, so expect more when the MC lays his feet on the upper heavens.
So, my style wasn't really acceptable and not that good since I started messing up with the readers' thoughts. I also did that with my other work and have still not learned since it comes naturally. So, if it is tolerable, thank you for staying with me.
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I really wanted to write a good review, but I just suck at thinking of words that convey my thoughts.
So yeah... exp exp exp exp exp exp exp exp. Currently on chapter 70 Very nice so far.
This is humorous and exciting! I actually admire your style in describing scenes and characters. This is really great. I added it to library waiting for more!
Has potential ..
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