The premise was interesting as one of the few sect building stories on this platform, but the execution was ... questionable with a lot of grammatical errors and the story doesn't weave together well. The story has potential but the use of english was anything but well made
ok i'm liking it so far, but god damn is it annoying reading how obsessed das is with elena. like, he saw her die in a video game and he felt like his soul was ripped out? give me a break man. one of my biggest pet peeves in novels are overly emotional and romantically obsessed protagonists.
Total score - 4.6 The story premise and the hook are very nice, I have a feeling that it will be a very good story just with what is written so far. There are small problems with the writing such as words not being placed appropriately. But overall it is very good.