It's a pretty average story. Too much info dumps. Stupid system. One-dimensional characters you really wouldn't care about (except for Man Man, who's a pretty annoying nationalistic pretty girl who REALLY doesnt know what she's saying. I want to punch her)
And Yes Man Man, it is discrimination when you overcharge the foreigner.
Overall Score: 2/5
minus 1 because CHINA
Nice start there, being kidnapped by some tsundere and becoming a couple due to his handsome appearance. The system only has roles of improving his intelligence and fusing techniques cultivated to perfection, but the use of this function seems more redundant, and the quality of your writing is average. Everything else is acceptable for the moment.
From the description alone you can already tell this will be a xenophobic piece of...art. There will probably be a mega serving of "chinanumbahwan" to complete the package.
Truthfully everything lacking in this story, all compartments is atrociously subpar...i was hoping for something good because of its ranking but its just that misleading. if there was even half star, I would have opted for it
I’m all caught up with this story now. It’s been an interesting read so far.
Grammar-wise it has some errors here and there that makes it a bit confusing but it becomes clearer if you consider the context of the sentence.
It’s not a bad translation better than most even but there is still room for improvement.
Personally, I’m wondering about the direction of the story. If it will end with Liyue or involve nations like Inazuma and Sumeru in the future.
You should keep uploading this here.
So afar its been pretty good, i liked the start and also our belived ml, who reminds me of me sometimes, this book is definitely worth reading and I’d asvice everyone to come read it[img=recommend]
This story, by far, has the best weapon idea I’ve ever read.
I actually don't know why Hollywood directors' story writers are so confident that their MCs will be trusted to directly direct films with big expenses.Mc is a beginner, 18 years old, his first foray into the world of film and he asked to become a director.no matter how good the story script the mc has, people in the film world will not believe it so easily.It's good that the manuscript wasn't just taken, we all know how copyright works.
Shameless author here, giving myself a shameless review. More or less, people will compare this story with Harry Potter. That's fine because you will see similarities, as well as great differences between the two.Come and join me in a Wizard World where things are not always what they seem, and surprises comes in small packages.Fall in love, and get addicted to the story that I weave. For I, your favorite storyteller, Elyon, will ensure that I will scratch that magical itch that you've been looking for in the lightnovel world.
Hey to you all, I am the writer of this book, please feel free to reach out and ask me any questions you may have. I will be trying to update this book as much as possible, however, I am really busy. If you have any suggestions, please don't hesitate to leave a comment, I'm fairly new to writing and wish to better my skills. This book will also jump back and forth in times from past and present, this is my first time trying so I'm sorry if it gets confusing, will try my very best. I am also working on another title please feel free to give a look, it's about the supernatural if you're interested.
It has mystery, it has thrill, it has attraction, it has hate-love romance, it has brutality and what not??!! Adding this beautifully crafted work to my library asap!! Well done Mahum!!