it's really good for a novice writer, probably better then any of the stories i've had to write for school. keep working hard and one day you might be able to get 1mil views! although work on explaining the world and just up the writing styles quality a little bit more! BTW i love the first person
From what I’ve read, the concept of the story itself isn’t bad. The story on the other hand is a mess. The chapters introduce a new character almost every chapter and doesn’t bother to develop them. By chapter 25, I’ve been introduced to more than 15 characters who have no connection to the Mc. Most of them only appear for once chapter before the next chapter switches back to the Mc. I have nothing against knowing a lot of characters or some background information, but throwing a bunch of irrelevant characters into the story every other chapter just makes the reader confused and lose focus.With how much POVs you keep switching too, at this point I doubt if the Mc is even the Mc.
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I enjoyed the story despite the numerous translation problems. The largest editing problem is a duplicate of chapter 11 in the spot of chapter 12. They don't seem to have skipped a chapter, but this means chapter 20 is actually chapter 19.If someone is excessively annoyed by inaccurate descriptions being refuted two sentences later, they shouldn't read this.
This Novel makes no like to do all sorts of painful things to the Author...... and that with a smile Don't ask why.Don't say ,,no one cares,,Don't come with I am crazy...becouse I know it already ?
Other than having a cheat like ability worth noticing, everything else is bad. It gets frustratingly worse with each chapter. The only good thing about this novel is that, the freedom and infinite possibilities laid out by cheat ability is smothered early on by the author. So, I didn't waste more time on this.
I really really want more chapters. this story is going along quite well, and the world building is pretty good. Can't wait to see how things progress later on in the story.
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really good. plz keep posting *GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD*GOOD
loving this story , i'm just eagerly waiting for the mc to start cultivating through *** , the stronger the girl he f u c k s the stronger he will become ! muhahahaha!
Ayo kak teruskaaaaan!
The author is very creative and the stories are very relatable ..... It will be nice if you continue writing ... I really love your stories