It's pretty good but it's get weird.i get it has pervert in the title but the hole thing with *** with old women part and her getting horny over a 15 year old while sitting on his dick like wtf
I've read through to chapter 25,and decided to drop it. main reason is that the storyline.. the mc is too overpowered and the world setting is 2d
A very fine story for readers to read if they are very much into the system thingy . A very fine new system introduced by the author thereby it is no harem but its best in writing sense. Lots of love to the author and hope they will update the novel on a daily time to time basis. WE HAVE HIGH HOPES FOR YOU AUTHOR! good luckk.
This novel has a much better synopsis than the other one (soccer/football related) . I hope this gets published first.At the moment it's last in the race we need more supporters.
Simple is better! Do not use big words and verbs in tenses that don't make sense! Even a comma can stop the flow of the story, and here it does. Please stop using big words just to show your vocabulary! It makes the story so hard to read. Cut the words that are put there to fill the page. It is a wonderful story with amazing potential but the writer has to realize that a phrase has rhythm. You block that rhythm with complicated words, commas that are missplaced or verbs in tenses that make no sense. A story is like a river. It has parts where it rages - that is where the reader gets to read faster, action is at the peak and you just want to know more! At the same time the river has parts where it is calm. Here the reader feels like wrapped in a cocoon of fluffy words. The immersion in the story happens here because this leads to the action! so please try harder.
The plot and prologue are appealing too.
Loved this book! It is captivating.
very interesting.. i love this book more chapter please
love the book can you pretty please post more chapters pleassssssseeeeee I'm dying to know what happened next
I think it's a great story so far! Looking forward to the rest.
the story is getting dragging
wonderful story can't wait to read book 3