the main character story is good, everything else could be better.the annoying child friend could do without. make sure you can read the story and imagine it picture perfect, so go into specific detail about surroundings.
This is so good! I love the characters and the plot! They're so creative and some parts are incredibly humorous too!! This is a verified must-read
It was a good novel author but i feel like i'm reading shura's wrath on this novel. Hope that there will be not much drama on this and specially death of love one's and close friend.
I am not a picky reader, I suck at English, so I am not really gonna comment on the grammar mistakes. Overall, this book has great potential the plot is great and it avoids most cliches from what I've read the character development is also good, but there is little to no dialog the you can see the character development but we never really see the developments being put into action. I truly like this book, but it's hard to read when it sounds like a documentary. I am going to drop this for now, but I'll pick this back up and hopefully see some changes in future chapters.
i want to read it quickly but i cant find it anywhere on any other website than here so update it asap
finally some novel i can read without the disgust in my mouth from all the stupid cliche **** but there could be some more information about the realms beyond already
Though I have a few bits to criticize, it's good so far.The first, and most important, is that all the dialogue sounds like the same person. It helps a lot with fleshing out a character to give them a unique voice. It doesn't have to be as large a change as Yoda or as obvious as the "desu" some authors plant at the end of a sentence, but it really helps if something changes based on who's talking. It also helps break the feeling that you're reading someone tell you a story instead of reading a story.Another thing to remember is that events in reality have a pace to them. It can be easy to write paragraphs about the thought process in the moment, and maybe that's how it actually happened in their head, but readers either lack the speed of thought or the IRL influence forcing their attention so it draws ******* out of a situation. If the situation is easy or doesn't require their attention, that makes sense, but if it's a desperate or intense situation it can disconnect the reader from the story. Basically, try to keep the intensity of the reader's experience the same as what's going through the MC's head.
Mc is powerful and smart the romance in the story is good and not too slow. there only thing lacking is grammar but it can be understand.....
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Didn't make it past 5 chapters before the sheer idiocy stopped me.Not even 5 chapters in and we have already been introduced to 3 women, 1 that already knew and lovea him and apparently fucks him regularly as well, 1 that barely met him for 2 sentences before we get the typical girl in distress, mc saves the day with unique skill scenario after which she obviously falls for him, and the last is the mandatory ice queen wife whose impression of him is entirely justified so far. Why do I say justified when it's clear he has circumstances beyond what her shallow world view can comprehend? Because what god forsaken fool of a alleged WAR GOD from a BATTLEFIELD would randomly go somewhere without informing anyone, including his **** doll that only knows how to get his love by being a slut, without any cash, any identification, any transport and basically zero preparations what so ever, resulting in him having to beg his narrow minded ice ***** wife for 100 bloody yuan? He brags alot mentally about being awesome and displaying his alpha male, typical domineering male ego that plaguesmost wuxia main characters, presumably so the author can soothe his readers and make them keep waiting until he maximizes the impact of the wife face slapping later. Problem here is that your foundation is so contrived, forced and mind numbingly stupid I can't even last long enough to reach your inevitably shallow-as-fuxk face slapping. Anywhoo.... The mc is bad enough but let's move on to the *** dolls (female characters). Why do I call them that? Because it's obvious that's what the author, or the translator is shooting for. Just look at way they are described. Nuff said. I would rather not repeat those crude, vulgar, sexually overloaded descriptions here and degrade my own IQ and EQ in the process. Ironically I dumped rebirth of a legendary guardian precisely because of that kind of sexually laced descriptions but again I find them here. And it's even worse if that's even possible. Do all new wuxia authors have to take mandatory classes on how to be misogynists nowadays or something? In summary? Not worth reading if you're a decent person.
Essentially just a Chinese cultivater copy of The Disastrous Life of Saiki K, right down to the evil looking dopey "friend" that he can't read the mind of. Incredibly disappointed in this.