The MC is crazy stupid. the book talks about revival chances and How supposedly he would never respawn after he ran out. Then he talks about how the price to buy one is high and then he runs out and uses all his money to buy powerups. Theres Lso a time where he gets ambushed by a gang and after he goes to hire a house maid and after is told the the maid he hired is a cyborg and after confronting the person deciedes to let her stay despite the fact the she could and is someone who is out to get him.
Beginning was a bit rough, it seems you are getting better at writing. Less run-ons and camma errors. I like the charcter ideas, but at the beginning you were going everywhere. Now it seems more solid, I would like to read more.
Good start, a pity after ch40 change to mtl translation
I definitely enjoy the trail read, and I believe it'll only get better as it progresses in the future. I'm looking forward to the journey I'll take along with the other readers
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This book is very well written, and has no grammar errors that I could notice while reading, or prevented me from reading in peace. I think there is daily updates, which is also nice! Keep it up!
Review @ 85 ch:It is a slow easy going novel that talkes about a dad raising his kids, also the growth speed of the kids is a little stalled, it is expected since the world building itself is slow. The daughters actions are not that lame as it is stated. It is quite a good read that can really scale into a really nice thing to read.Spoiler down.. ......The things that causes the story to have potential are the following:System, daughters physic, who is their mother, and how will these kids develop.Things that are missing:Mc background, what he did when he arrived, what are the bounties he got, what is his physic.
This novel is one of those where the MC gets a system not to power-up themselves but to run a business. I personally really like this kind of novels, so it's interesting to read.So far there are only 4 chapters so I guess the shop would become more and more popular overtime.A few suggestions I wanted to give based on my personal opinion (author you can ignore these if you want since they are just my opinions)Do a bit more world building, there are certain things I was able to imagine on my own but also things that I couldn't create a mental image of. One such thing is the shop: there is a transformation but the reader doesn't get to know much about how it looks now compared to before. I'd recommend checking out Black Tech Internet Cafe or some other similar novels to get inspiration on how to describe the changes.From the general writing perspective I'd suggest avoiding repetitive use of words such as realized and shabby, and look for some synonyms.The plot is a bit fast but I don't mind that too much.Overall it's a very nice novel. I hope Lin Fan's sister isn't crazy and the shop grows well. Keep working hard!
Why the HELL did it go from all free to you have to pay for the chapters I was all the way up to 1375 and all the chapters got updated 8 hours ago and now you have to pay like 9 coins to read them. Like what?
So far this novel has a great start, the system is definitely interesting and a fresh take on such things and the MC is a pretty decent guy and being an artist is a definitely change from the usual MC. If it keeps or exceeds this quality in the future I definitely give it top ratings for being worth reading start to finish.
This is very nice. It has a good plot and the storyline is also intriguing. Coupled with that, the writer is also good. The only thing to look out for is the punctuation and small/capital letter use. All in all, it's a nice and interesting book to read
This is the first time I read, a novel about mechas , so engaging and addictive, with several narrative elements of Wuxia fused with the good old Gundam space opera with a dash of Star Wars, I have never seen a chemistry as perfect as this story.