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synopsis made me remember "my pick up artist system" novel, what an art it was but sadly dropped. I will add this for now and read it when there are more chaps.
This! people! this is the Story about the System that you should definitely give a try! This story has a Fantastic Premise and unlike what the name suggests this is not the typical story about fantasy with System like power system. this is an actual Scifi story about Technology and how it can be used to do productive things and benefit Humanity.Though I love this story I can't help but see some typos and mistakes here and there along with a Strange choice of words that could be easily fixed. overall this story is easy to understand if you don't various appropriately placed scientific words.Since that mistake can be easily fixed and doesn't cause a major interruption to the story combine with my own limited knowledge of Grammar I think this one still deserves the five star on writing. give it a try and you will see how Great this story is.
This chapter is a masterclass in controlled pacing. Let me break down why it works so well. It opens with what could have been a boring exposition dump — school schedules, grade levels, family logistics — but the author immediately subverts that by filtering everything through Taotao's ghostly perspective. 'She had learned quite a bit during her years as a ghost.' Boom. Suddenly those mundane details about Changshun starting junior high become loaded with meaning because we know this character sees time differently. She's thinking in five-to-ten-year horizons while everyone else is worried about next week's groceries. The structure moves in three distinct waves. First wave: the family's educational planning and Taotao's strategic thinking about the future. This is the intellectual layer. Second wave: the emotional confrontation with the family's financial tensions — the daughters-in-law gossiping, the father sending money, the Old Lady drawing a line in the sand. This is the conflict layer. Third wave: Zhang Zhaodi's unexpected appearance and the quiet, almost fragile moment of connection at the end. This is the emotional payoff. What's brilliant is how the author uses the fabric-giving scene as a pivot point. Before that, the atmosphere is 'somewhat strange.' After Taotao distributes the cloth, 'the family had become much warmer toward her.' It's a small action with enormous narrative weight — one gesture shifts the entire emotional temperature of the household. The transition from the tense family discussion to the mountain scene is also perfectly timed. We've had enough conflict, enough weight, and then suddenly it's just a little girl and her second aunt walking up a mountain together. The pacing breathes. It lets us exhale. And that ending — 'As for Zhang Zhaodi, suddenly being affectionately linked arm in arm, she froze on the spot' — is such a perfect button to close on. No resolution, no big statement, just a moment of pure, unguarded human connection. The author trusts us to feel everything without spelling it out.
It's interesting but unfortunately, the translation needs some work.
4.2Atfirst i really liked the story but after reading a few comments i started questioning some parts of the story and realized it had quite a few mistakes. Even then its was still pretty nice. I like it when people change up things, in this case mc went to the past. Keep up the good work
grammar is a problem sadly makes it hard to read
"Oh Lilith, what's wrong?" Light asked, who just woke up from the bed.
"Please, speak with me"
When we reach our parents, they are a little more relaxed. The people with them are still stunned.
The boy had thus lived, knowing that he possessed the power of a god. Did he live calmly with it ? Did he ignored it, too afraid to use this way too powerful magic ?
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