Here what you got after reading it:
- MC that doesnt have MC characteristic
- MC sister that have MC characteristic
-As story goes the MC sister gone for the purpose of character develop for the MC
-Alas MC still fucking stupid like "Why did Silver Dragon Mark Can Move on it own or Why MC Father family didn't search him and dissapointed when he know the family have some internal affair even after you know how human nature work" and it's so funny when i read this
-You will find it the Title for the Novel didn't fit with MC character
-The MC Father "After the MC have the Power to Rescue his Father guess what The MC Father have Gone Missing Again Like WTF with this novel to think i hope the story got much better but its not even develop to be worse than the first
** : Sorry for my bad grammar :)
I find one of the most annoying, and also immersion breaking, parts of this book is how inside a video game they can somehow get drunk. And not only are they drunk, but real world tolerance affects how much they can drink. One character or another, without logging out, drinks inside the game, gets drunk, and him being drunk becomes a major plot point several times per arc.
Shameless review from the author here. I made this review so that people can ask questions here. I also inform you that I am trying my best to write this novel as cleanly as possible but as my first language is not English, There are chances of mistakes happening here and there. But I am trying to change that. Constructive Criticism is welcome but know that this is my first book and mistakes will most probably be made
I'll only consider this a good story if in the end, the husky from the past arrives, beats up the MC and steals all his powers to take back to the past MC.
Finally, some good people picked this novel :) To sum it up story is slow, no op mc... well there are too many good points actually, if you no longer feel exited with mainstream cn novel try this one. The only downside is 3ch/week schedule, but it's way better than nothing:) Ps: if you like wmw or revered insanity you will probably enjoy this one too.
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this book I ls really and a must read. the Grammer and look punctuation are up there with some good books I've read, the mystery and the twists were well done and executed in a way I didn't really expect, the author really did well with this book and I couldn't really find much that I didnt like in the story. it's we'll paced and the plot really grabs you and never lets go.
good work author you made a really good and interesting story, keep it up
An honestly entertaining story with a concept that I haven't heard before. Keep up the good work
Salam chokran 3la had novel
I hope you update this awesome novel frequently
Since I read manhwas, I liked this story so much and the style of writing is easy to read and imagine. Keep up the good work.All the best..
I'd recommend reading this. The start is a bit shaky, but overall it's still enjoyable. Of course, there are still problems with the novel, but I think they are minor enough to ignore.Here are some of my personal things that I find could have been done better. 1. The world is building. I believe the world building had so much more potential. It's not bad, but it could have been way better, I think.2. The age of the characters. No matter how much I try and imagine it, a bunch of 16-year-olds trying to save the world is ridiculous. Well, this is not much of a problem, but it just felt like that one itch you can't reach.3. Honestly, the relationships. At one point, they are extremely fickle, but the next, they are so absurdly complicated that you question why they even began. MC and Maria had a good relationship until Succubus had to come in and ruin it. I'm scared my ship might sink.4. The fights. They were good, but speed was never mentioned, so I always found myself struggling to imagine them properly.As I said, these are my personal problems, and I don't think many people will have a problem with them. Anyway, all in all, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for all the hard work, author, and thanks for the enjoyable novel. I'm going to continue reading this.