Great start, the groundwork for character development is laid out in the first few chapters.
Yes, I have read this on RL so just asking are you the real creator or just a Pirate/thief Just asking?Also, STREAM VIEWERS DON'T KNOW WORDS OR WRITE BIG SENTENCES Cus limited time more people etc They get drowned out!
"Not really, this whole thing is a mess" Isabelle replied as her brain worked on overdrive.
loved it. it's just that only onr chapter per day ??? i want more chapterss
A novel with great potential, minimal grammatical mistakes, writing needs work, paragraphs need to be a bit shorter (1 and utmost 3 sentences often), the pace is too slow I think, 1 fight with a few bandits shouldn't take 5 chapters in my opinion, and it could have been done in chapter and utmost 3.
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This novel has a lot of potential, i was amazed with gow you start this book Author!!!! Everything is well put together and I'll be reading more of your work????? So keep those chapters coming because I'm hooked.What a determine father??? this world need more men like Matthew!!!!
Senpai, I'll leave you a review. Your work is great and has an anime feel to it like the light animes about friendship and everyday life. Your updating stability is good, I hope you maintain those daily updates haha. Don't get lazy! Continue on fixing your punctuations, I will support you til the end.-Your Kouhai 〜(￣▽￣〜)
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achei mt bom o desenvolvimento da historia, vou seguir vendo so esperando os novos cap :) ( sim, sou br e estou lendo pelo google tradutor )
Very very good novel. Although the synopsis was not too interesting the novel it self is very interesting. Give I a try!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Ok I will start with the fact that the concept of the story is kinda interesting. Basically mc becomes a god over a 2d univercancerse of his own creation. Sounds cool, right? Well the problem with this novel is the author has no understanding of science or human biology yet precedes to talk about things like how if everything stopped moving then time would stop or the stupid idea that yoga and eating well will help his cancer. He seems to think controlling the various glands in his body will cure his cancer and wants to make himself taller by making more growth hormone, which wouldn't work at all but would instead give him a problem like enlarged feet or hands and the like. Growth hormones don't make you taller if you are full grown like damn.But of course the journey doesn't end here, beside the authors atrocious understanding of basic science, he loves just summarizing chapters. What do I mean by that? Well I mean a chapter will read like a summary. Little to no detail at all. In the span of a single paragraph he can pick a girl up, have sex, and be home in as little as 4 sentences. Honestly it was the concept of the mc being in control of a new world that got me reading this but this is at best a 2 star novel. The mc is more 2d then the world he controls.The author just ****ting on basic science is what destroys this fucking novel, it would have been a thousand times better if the author came up with a magic reason for his cancer being defeated and why he gets taller and **** instead of trying to use his incredibly limited understanding of the human body to write how the mc plans to make himself better.Read if you have nothing better to do or read. Literally a newspaper is better than this.