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This story has already been told...
I have this same story by the same author in my library but strangely I can no longer access its synopsis / table of contents, neither on my cell phone nor on the computer, too bad.
Although its chapters reach 146 this remastering has already surpassed it, in my humble opinion it should have the other one visible to other people and update it a little like 3 chapters a month, which is less than its paid remastering that only reaches about 40 or 46... a pity because I don't have paypal and the other method is not available in my country.
The name of the story I mentioned?
Building Warships in the Game
This story progresses well, the only flaw which, I would say, needs improving was the author's writing quality.
The author highlights the narrative with the use of many adjectives, this, in itself is fine, however these adjectives have not been used to their full capacity which in turn makes the read slightly cliche and annoying. This is aided with the use of 'pointing out the obvious'. For example, "it was a scene almost everyone had gotten used to as it happens quite often" - the reader already knows that it happening frequently is how everyone had gotten used to it, there is no need to clarify. The constant clarification and not leaving things to the reader's imagination takes the enjoyment and thrill out of reading such works of art, and thus makes them bored; and for the author, it is harder for them to create dramatic twists and turns in their plot. I would also suggest to go back and read through the grammar again to spot the small errors which need refining.
I am aware that this may be a lot to take in for the author, and I do apologise if it is. The writing and plot were well, the author has potential, so please do not be disheartended, there were only very small corrections which need to be made.
The overall design of the characters, world background and pacing of the story so far has been executed pretty well so far. Although, the author has made quite a few grammatical and punctuation mistakes throughout the story. For example, some words hv been spelt wrong or repeated (e.g. it was the the book or helpo). Now, It’s up to author to go back and fix this. To leave this review on a good note, the stability of chapters seem to be very consistent with every chapter filled with detailed descriptions enabling the readers to visualise every scene. Hope this review serves not only as a way to improve yourself, but also motivate you. Good luck on your book! [img=recommend]
is there a discord for this novel.......
I love the idea behind this story. There are some mistakes here and there but not enough to throw you off because you will be drawn in from the first paragraph. One could tell the author is giving her all in this book, and I appreciate her effort. The book is added to library and awaiting new updates. ?
The MC is a guy who inherited and spent it all and died. The fact that the author thinks that this type of character will attract empathy is insanity. The vast majority of the population wants the useless heirs to die even faster.
specialy loved unique story line mixed with comedy and suspense characters.
can someone tell me who's the artist for the cover/thumbnail? I'm annoyed that so many of these authors use other's artwork yet they don't credit the artist.
hmm, the MC was always being protected by someone and not strong enough to do something by his own, i guess it was how the story Will be advance in the future, the MC Will became strong and then someone stronger Will try to attack him and again someone much stronger than the enemy Will protect the MC, and don't forget the side character that Will have bad ending, either it Will be r@pd, killed, humiliated, and along this line to wait for the MC to safe them when it was already to late, not my kind of thing so gonna drop this one, but the development of the story is great so i think most people Will like this story.......
A history with rushed everything, the history, the crumbling of the original world. So far the only redeming quality is how the "Rebirth" of the main character is seen by the autor but even that is rushed.
dude after reading this I cannot read other novels because I want a book similar to this but I can't find any.If anyone knows of a similar novel recommend it pls
Btw author if you are reading this review for the sake of your fans pleaseeeee release more chapters every week.