If you are looking for a book with thrilling and heart felt experience, then you have reached the right book. I especially loved the second volume
are chapters with 18+ stuff labeled because I want to read this but won't to avoid 18+ stuff
because I find that stuff to be a bit gross sorry
You know the story is a good one when you read the prologue, know it isn't fantasy so you need to close the novel just to see the tags and pray that the tragedy tag is not there because you were already shipping the characters for their happy ending. At least this is what happened to me. (sadly, the tragedy tag is in this story)
I think my rating says it all. From the prologue I was captivated, and each chapter is developed and described so perfectly that there it leaves the reviewer with just one word: AWESOME!
Keep writing! I hope to read more about Marcus and Ayesha in the future (even if the prologue broke my heart into tiny pieces)
story falls in line with usual second chance vrmmo stories. the writing and overall story however is quite good and enjoyable.
only real downside for me is the grammar. it reads barely any better than a machine translation. if author could get a editor to help with his grammar this could easily become an amazing work.
if you are interested in this genre of fiction I'd recommend adding to your library, checking in every once and a whole, throwing a stone occasionally, and when author finally gets an editor you binge read this like there's no tomorrow.
As far as novels on this site go, this one is a rough diamond. It's quality and storytelling are a step above many others. All the author needs is time and practice now... and potentially a mass edit once he becomes better at English.
Here's my 5 star review, Author. Hopefully this will bring more readers. The rest is up to you.
If you're looking to improve, I'd say you should work on "showing" instead of "telling." The early chapters offer a lot of in-depth insight into every character, but it interrupts their actions and hurts the smooth plot progression. It also makes the chapters seem shorter and uneventful. Instead, display their emotions through their actions, and their thoughts through their spoken words to other characters.
I love what you are doing with the mute, slave-girl. Because she can't speak the characters have to get creative, meaning it's more fun to read. Plus, she's very mysterious so long as that communication and knowledge gap is maintained. I like it.
Good luck.
The plotlint makes sure to keep you going the more the book continues to go. It's quite amazing to be honest, and I'm quite sure this book will keep me invested as I go,
It's pretty good so far I really enjoyed the first 5 chapters
Author's been bugging me for quite some time now for a review so here goes.It's good. There's action, there's haŕem and there's weird powers. Some stuff are quite basic and some scenes are dramatic for no reason.But overall, not bad. In fact, dare I say it's good. Ya Happy now, Yet?
Interesting character plot. I like how Larry is Calm and reads the situation quickly. I'm just confused of the character's looks but apart from that everything else is cool. Keep writing author San.
This is just trashDon't even waste your time
Pls read my book just try you will not be disappointed
Awesome nice to read , very interesting story, English good, story plot getting better, no regret reading it, the flow of story is exiting and wanting to keep on reading