In the first few chapters, the story and the writing are good. Author starts with good amount of world detail, a justified motive for MC and the personality of the characters are kinda relatable. Later, the story's pacing is faster, uncomfortable to read. It feels like this story was planned as a 1000-1500 chapter book, and was condensed into less than 500 chapters. There's no personality to characters, no apparent thinking process of MC, and no logical relation to the original world description. Everything is justified by Author literally writing directly: because I said so. Constant breaking of 4th wall, heaps of time skips. Yet, plenty of pointless filler dialogues in fight scenes. I bought the whole novel when I run out of free chapters. Now I regret it. Dropped at ch133. It's just pure BS at this point.
I seriously loved it till the end. I seriously recommend it. The longer you read this the better story develops. I even cries ? while reading few chapters. A story like this is hard to come by. I just hope for writer to bring more New Stories and contents.
Story is great. The author changed the events of HP so much just from the beginning that it made me very very interested. Author's grammar is great. It's at the level that it may be approved by the proud grammar nazis. Author's updates consistently. The author hasn't broken his(her?) vow of updating 2 chapters a day 5 times per week yet. All in all this fanfic has the potential to be among the exceptional if author keeps the consistency, keeps learning and evolving his(her?) writing as the story progresses, and not be too greedy when he(she?) starts to monetizing the novel.
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The world-building is good, the characters are good, the pacing is nicely done not too slow nor too fast. The hype is there and the emotions are there. Looking forward to more chapters!
What a great story, with a stunning world. each character has solid, memorable, and likeable development. Good luck with that, ik it’s gonna be great ^__^ 10/10
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Awesome story! Keep up the good work Author! Please always update more chapters so we as a readers will gifts and votes with all our hearts! Thanks
Overall, the first five chapters of this novel demonstrate a promising start to the story with well-developed characters and an immersive world-building.Lei Zhen, the protagonist, is introduced as a level-headed and calm individual, with a distinct lack of lustful behavior towards the mature woman clad in green robes, showing his character's depth and credibility. This is further reinforced by his clear and logical thought process, as seen in his decision to accept the default setting for his character creation rather than risking a time-consuming process of creating a new character from scratch.The world-building of the game, Magnolia, is also well-established, with the incorporation of the VRMMORPG aspect and the existence of different game classes for players to choose from. The concept of Unique Classes, obtainable through hidden missions and story quests, adds an additional layer of mystery and excitement for players.The system within the game is also well-explained, with the use of equipment providing bonus stats and the function of the scanner during character creation. However, the occurrence of the bug that transported Lei Zhen to the high-level Lux Forest raises questions about the reliability and stability of the game.One constructive criticism for the novel would be the lack of description and detail in the setting and environment of Lux Forest. While it is mentioned that the area is filled with greenery, more specific and immersive descriptions of the surroundings would further enhance the reader's experience and understanding of the character's location.Overall, the first five chapters of this novel have successfully drawn me in as a reader and piqued my interest in the story. I am excited to see how the plot progresses and how Lei Zhen's character will develop in the immersive world of Magnolia.